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Liar
Contributed by
PurPleHeart
on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 06:46:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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Our dreams we were
. It was liar , our nights we were
it was liar
Our dates we were
.. it was liar , that is enough
.. it was liar
Our dreams it was devil ,live around four wall ,,, thought was it my own fool ,close my eyes all time , illusion follow me , have no honey .have no honey
You always had strong responses, You always had been innocent and victim
I couldnt had you
..huh , It was hands touches
..liar
It was eyes tears
.. liar , it was the craving instant
liar , liarrrrrrr
So we were liar memories , story and narratives liar
all of that things was lair
Our dreams was cover-up , My love to you was suicide, My heart was feeling and noticed ,was doubting about the feeling ,I was should take decision
My heart that was blind and lose in , My heart had been astray his way
It has to unveil of the liar at last moment ,unveil to seen the truth ,These the angle honey
I got just liar promises , liar craves , liar responses , lair
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Regretful cause it was my faults ,I rejecting the fate with you ,
The approach from you is offense ,Regretful to come the end early ,
Whole the poor wishes , lived and dead too
I will be once again , that is enough lair wishes , enough hurts and stories is lair
We were lair people , we were like lairs water at cup ,lairrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
Our dreams we were
. It was liar , our nights we were
it was liar
Our dates we were
.. it was liar , that is enough
.. it was liar
Copyright Β©
PurPleHeart
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2005-12-09 18:46:58]
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Re: Liar
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by DesolantDreamer on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 10:03:03 PM AEST
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| Wow. That pretty much explains it. Ummm, my blessings are with you and may you come to peace within yourself? Arigaitou for sharing such an expressive poem. |
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Re: Liar
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 9th December 2005 @ 10:10:43 PM AEST
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| "it was liar" isnt grammatically correct and makes really no sense at all, but that is one of the many instances where this happened. too many ellipses for this, because they are quite aggravating. the entire poem's use of liar was aggravating in itself. there are too many fragments in this to even get a clue as to what is going on half the time, along with your particular syntax. |
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Re: Liar
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by mistifi on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 01:36:45 PM AEST
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| i applaud your eagerness to convert your writing to english so that we all can enjoy your talent. keep it up. |
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Re: Liar
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 6th January 2006 @ 03:19:15 PM AEST
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| wow nice poem welcome to your poetry dot com.. |
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