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Festering
Contributed by
waos
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Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 01:57:36 AM in AEST
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My chest is heavy and it's a chore to breathe.
I want to hold a gun to my chest:
send an explosion through the center
of this hole inside of me. You see...
I can't imagine the damage when I'm empty.
I want to slide a scalpel down the center
of my chest
and have my rib cage break open
like the jaws of a beast;
then I could reach inside to that pit -
that festering core that I feel -
cut it lose,
remove it like a tumor
so I can be free again,
healthy again.
But its eating me alive inside:
I can feel it winding its way about the tissue -
slipping between organs -
constricting around veins -
until my guts, convulsing, rasp out the words
of desperation.
I want to see my rib cage slam open
so I can find this rotting pit -
this festering core -
and eradicate it...
even if it is my very being
and what makes me
me.
~Kara~
Copyright ©
waos
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2005-12-03 01:57:36]
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Re: Festering
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by Vampirequeen on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 02:20:47 AM AEST
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wow pretty heavy and quite deep.
Some of us sometimes feel that way too.
take care |
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Re: Festering
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 08:14:19 AM AEST
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A very strong poem revealing your emotional termoil and yet u overcome so well in your daily struggle 2 survive, greatly exspressed.
Ben |
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Re: Festering
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 3rd December 2005 @ 09:44:27 AM AEST
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| Excellent...left me with such a feeling. This piece was so very deep and revealing. I know some of my own favorite pieces are those that I have written in difficult times. The "festering sore" interesting way to described the trouble soul. The write was intense, to say the least. Your pain is felt. Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: Festering
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 5th December 2005 @ 04:06:27 PM AEST
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Kara what can I add that the others haven't said already. A deep, sad and emotional write. Expressed so deep and so well.
Chin up and may the days ahead be much brighter for you.
*heartfelt hugs for you*
~sue~ |
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Re: Festering
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 7th December 2005 @ 10:36:55 PM AEST
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Wow this is a rather graphic write, but I
enjoyed it intensely and I must say that I loved
the irregular line structure that was most
cool indeed. 'Twas good to see another write
from you my dear keep up the writing and I
am sure soon we will see some happier
poems from you. Thanks for sharing this.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Festering
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by emystar on
Friday, 30th December 2005 @ 02:23:56 AM AEST
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Sad an gory but well written.
huggs,
emy
Hope u feel better now. |
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