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Ruins
Contributed by
ruby_dreamer
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Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 02:38:24 AM in AEST
Topic:
AmericanTragedy
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O hail the winds, secrets they hold!
Of a treasured past now lost and cold;
An icy grasp on a life so fine
Brought to ruins by the exposed divine!
The beauty there had not a place
In a modern world whose greedy face
Looks upon the rarest jewel with lust,
The broken chain, the broken trust...
Copyright ©
ruby_dreamer
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2005-12-02 02:38:24]
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Re: Ruins
(User Rating: 1 )
by ndat on
Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 06:04:51 AM AEST
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| It is good, but it is cliched so it is rather boring. Try delving a little deeper into both cultures and find something not written about so much, it would be a lot more intereasting of a read. |
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Re: Ruins
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by ruby_dreamer on
Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 09:51:41 AM AEST
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| I didn't intend to expose much of either culture. In fact, it's supposed to be crafted in a way that would make you not think it was about the Indians at all. Cliched? Really? Hmmm...I see no such thing, but if you say so...thanks for the advice. |
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Re: Ruins
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 2nd December 2005 @ 06:57:46 PM AEST
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Ruby_Dreamer I am so fascinated and intrigued by ur remarkable work. The more I read the more I like. Very gifted and talented.
Sometimes so few words can say so much. Well done.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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