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bye freedom bye
Contributed by
lostrelic
on
Wednesday, 30th November 2005 @ 04:47:13 PM in AEST
Topic:
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living this world spirit traveling free
crypt of bars surrounding me
stuck in a job thats against everything i believe
seeing the shovel and digging my way
creeping sadness unexplained well a life time of Loneliness
holiday cheer and the family i didn't have
pain that eats at my wheels
Watching love but never knowing why
i found lust (just touch but no taste)
tears shed too many these seasons
over old habits that never die
caring too much is never possible is it ?
my world in my backpack that's one i miss
feeling the need anytime to leave and able to do it
fate as desire tugging my strings at pity's length
planting pleasure but always wanting more
Pens too hard to write now a day's
inspiration hard to find unless i seek the bottle
too much to bear nowadays things coming too hard
starting to sink further in my hold
anuff to still look for love
but desire's out of the way
too scared to dream
not afraid to die
my pen is my bird
it's a slow death with change
bye freedom bye
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2005-11-30 16:47:13]
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Re: bye freedom bye
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by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 30th November 2005 @ 08:14:02 PM AEST
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It's very unique for sure, and i like it.
There's a lot of pondering and struggle in it that i can
much relate to, that's the best part of reading others
poetry.
Pens to hard to write now a day's
inspiration hard to find unless i seek the bottle
too much to bear nowadays things coming to hard
Honest, brutal.
Keep it up. |
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Re: bye freedom bye
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st December 2005 @ 02:05:50 AM AEST
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a sence of desperation and frustration with this one i get yeh life can screw with u when u least need it very effective write rm nice job.
Ben |
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Re: bye freedom bye
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 4th December 2005 @ 08:38:34 AM AEST
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| this poem touched me deeply ... well written with raw emotion ... great write ... Jan |
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