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Rain
Contributed by
Zanobia
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Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 09:26:49 PM in AEST
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the rain falls down on my unworthy head,
masking the tears brought on by my life,
as the tears flow harder, so does the rain,
hiding me from every one,
hiding me from me, the true me,
i run, faster faster and faster,
for what seems hours on end,
running from myself,
untill i finally fall,
then a hand finds me,
it is mine,
i look up into my face, my face aged just a little bit,
"get up, dont you see? this is what you turn in to."
i was beautiful, and i was seeing the real me for the first time,
" everything will turn out fine, you shouldnt care what they think about you."
and i didnt and dont,
"just remeber i will always be inside of you."
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Re: Rain
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by moon_light on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 09:45:32 PM AEST
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| this one is a good poem. keep it up. |
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Re: Rain
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by Zanobia on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 09:52:31 PM AEST
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| thnk you |
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Re: Rain
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by deathbringer on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 11:06:25 PM AEST
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| impressive.It reminds me of the ressurection of Pheonix from it's own ashes.nicely done.good work. |
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Re: Rain
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by Zanobia on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 11:11:19 PM AEST
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| thank u. u know i think that when somone comments on your poem u go comment on thiers. is that how it works? jk |
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Re: Rain
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 11:16:22 PM AEST
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A deep and very well expressed write packed with emotional issues one deals with inside themselves. Beauty is beyond the surface.
"get up, dont you see? this is what you turn in to."
i was beautiful, and i was seeing the real me for the first time,
" everything will turn out fine, you shouldnt care what they think about you."
and i didnt and dont,
"just remeber i will always be inside of you."
Well done and thanks so much for sharing this with us.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Rain
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by Zanobia on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 11:21:53 PM AEST
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| yea. i guess it is kind of like a hope for no matter how ugly or how beautiful u think u r now, that can change in an instant or over eternity. |
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