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Of Course
Contributed by
xxbreathlessx
on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 08:57:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The room’s flaming lights slash across your face,
Sinking into every crease,
Greased between each pore.
Its pale breath clashes
With your skin
And your words melt into the background.
Your arm’s hairs curl
Creating thin springs
Jumping out from your worn skin,
Sprinkled with freckles.
A smile spreads thin
Across your face, clean,
Shaven.
Gray highlights the fine hairs on your head,
Mingling with the lightest of brown,
Intertwining with the darkest.
Your hands decorated with deep red cuts,
Courtesy of the heavy metal boxes you carry.
Your fingers, tough; long,
Reach out for my hand,
My arm,
My back,
Anything to keep me connected to you,
To keep from losing me in the restaurant’s wooden horizon.
Your eyes search mine madly for any sign of forgiveness,
Of love.
I glance past the window.
The clocks hands have touched the tips of numbers
When I see you standing, alone.
I inhale profoundly,
Sucking in courage, hope.
I walk over to you, softly
And wrap my arms around your waist.
You hug me back,
Your arms, mountains of muscle,
Squeeze so hard I feel my lungs
Clawing for air.
I look into your eyes,
Hoping you’d finally find your answer.
Of course I love you, Dad.
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xxbreathlessx
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2005-11-24 20:57:21]
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Re: Of Course
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by pondering_poetess on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 09:22:43 PM AEST
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| Your words paint a vivid scene with your excellent use of descriptive language. I love the way you bring the reader in one direction, and then surprise them with the ending. Nicely done. |
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Re: Of Course
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 11:06:56 PM AEST
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What a brilliant twist you had at the end of ur poem. A very well mastered piece of poetry. Well done on producing an excellent write.
*hugs*
~sue~ |
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Re: Of Course
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by Dandy on
Friday, 25th November 2005 @ 11:40:31 AM AEST
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| I love this poem...brilliant |
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Re: Of Course
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by outlaw_mutiny on
Sunday, 25th December 2005 @ 11:38:56 PM AEST
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if you write your problems away you shouldnt have anymore
good write |
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