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A million roads paved away from me
Contributed by
weepingprophet
on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 11:32:34 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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our good bye will remember you
in the moonlight
darkened around you
is the empty abyss of our love
your seventeen push ups
here i am on the concrete
puking up my guts
not because you have been touching me
not because i swallowed all of you
and your offering of love
no, because i look up
wipe my mouth vigorously
and try to snatch that snapshot
clear it from my mind
take back the memory
of you practising for a million
roads paved away from me
is this it?
you catch me staring and laugh
funny.
the thought of you- face pressed into the ground-
bleeding to death on foreign soil
and i'm not laughing
i can't appreciate your grin
oh, how passion kills us to live
and for a moment i had forgotten
that this would all be painted so lonely
our good-bye will remember you
in that perfect moonlight
the simple grin and satisfaction
of a moment
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Re: A million roads paved away from me
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 03:47:17 PM AEST
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Great! Just great! It's impossible to pin any words descriptive enough to what you offer the eyes and mind of a reader. If i thought to ask, i think it would be like asking a magician how they made the rabbit appear wouldn't it? Great work...what else is to be said
the entire piece i admire a lot, but these words are too well put to be ignored:
oh, how passion kills us to live
and for a moment i had forgotten
that this would all be painted so lonely
keep up the most excellent work. |
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Re: A million roads paved away from me
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 25th November 2005 @ 01:56:59 AM AEST
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[our good-bye will remember you
in that perfect moonlight
the simple grin and satisfaction
of a moment]
exquisite |
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