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Rain
Contributed by
butterflygirl40
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Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 12:38:09 AM in AEST
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Here comes the rain again.
I am looking L ike a birdbrain.
I look over at the bloodstain.
I am Always complaining of the bloodstain.
I sit here and I get a eyestrain.
I must be insane to sit here and get a eyestrain.
I get a mirgraine from looking at the rain.
MY mirgraine Is nothing but pain.
Then a loud plane gives me a mirgraine.
I remain looking at the rain.
Then I hear a loud train.
Then when I leave I leave a tearstain.
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Re: Rain
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 01:17:11 AM AEST
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this probably doesnt make ant sense
but could you please comment me.. |
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Re: Rain
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 01:57:59 AM AEST
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I notice i am getting people to read my poems
but no comment on this poem,, if you are going to read my poem . could you please be nice enough to take out the time and comment me on my poem!! it would be nice to let me know what you thought about this poem when you read it!!! ... I really dont like it when someone reads my poems and i dont get no comment... i always comment people on their poems when i read them, so can you be nice enough to at least leave me a comment... Thanks butterflygirl40^_^:) |
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Re: Rain
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 08:57:59 AM AEST
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Doesnt anyone like this poem:(( it doesnt
look like it...... i havent gotten one comment
on this poem!!!!! you could at least comment
me!!!! to let me know what you think,,, its bad
when you put a poem on this site and you have to comment yourself:(
when I go and read someone's poem I always comment them... you can see I was bored so I decided to comment myself!!
IT doesnt take much to leave a comment ....
why doesnt anyone leave me a comment on this..... LATER..... |
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Re: Rain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 10:55:15 AM AEST
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if nothing else u have expressed u, that says it all, i've been away first i've seen of this, quite clever and intreguing little peice of writting.
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Re: Rain
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by rinx on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 12:17:42 PM AEST
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Haha. aw bless
When i read this i was quite bemused, then i read youyr little comments and i couldnt help think 'Aw bless...!' Poor girl... i commented you... hehe.... cos your great... i read your other poem, you have a distinct style - short and sweet... ;)
p.s maybe you should see a doctor about those migraines...?!?!? ;D
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Re: Rain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 01:53:55 PM AEST
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dont you love rain? :)
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Re: Rain
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by Whisper on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 07:16:19 PM AEST
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Hmm interesting write this. Perhap more about the relation between the Bloodstain and Why it brings the tears/tearstains. Whose blood is it? Or more thought about the migraine aspect ... what has brought it on ...Just a bit of asssitance,comment .
I enjoyed the light and airiness of it. Thanks for sharing.
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