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Acid Rain
Contributed by
waos
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Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 10:50:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Want to spew the contents of my soul
upon the sky
and cry for the acid raining down,
blinding the eye,
bleeding for a revelation,
some reason to see the sun rise.
Stop the virus spreading inside,
tributaries fed from the heart.
Kill the tumour at the source,
drag pain and love apart
and end this lie of life.
Purge the intrusive memories
of your callous strength,
my weak denial;
conflict reigns
until condemned in inner trial.
Unfocused reality, see the memory;
eyes perceive the unsaid:
every longing
every draining red;
when did we fade away?
Conduct the flames,
orchestrate everything in fantasy.
Hide away from every day
hoping for a future that isn't now,
while todays just decay.
~Kara~
Copyright ©
waos
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2005-11-20 22:50:14]
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Re: Acid Rain
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by Essentially9 on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 10:57:08 PM AEST
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| well kara i think that this poem exemplifies your unique style. i think its changed since ive last read your poetry, and i think your style is what does and will set you apart from other writers. ::is reminded of the worlds pollution and is now once again disgusted with the global warming, pollution, and conservation mess the world is going through:: =] pesky little things to deal with im sure. |
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Re: Acid Rain
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 11:58:34 PM AEST
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Wow I can't even begin to pick out everything
I loved about this just every line was perfect
and yeah I could be here all night raving on
about it so I'll quit while I'm ahead. Just know
Kara that this was superb.
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Re: Acid Rain
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 02:02:05 AM AEST
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Kara, it's good to see how you've grown with your writes. Everytime im able to read your poem it seems to get better and better and i like that.
This was sad and yet so beautiful.
Good job.
Jane~ |
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Re: Acid Rain
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 10:44:54 AM AEST
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As always a most perfect application of the macarbre, nice as ever kara.
(((((kara)))))
Ben |
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