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Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 10:32:10 PM in AEST
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I try to put it behind me
You are now a figure of my past
I wash my hands of you now
Of your filth I’m free at last
I loved you with a passion
My heart lay in your hands
Fragile, yet so innocent
It broke at your command
Each tiny little fragment
Now spoiled damaged and marred
This mistreated frail heart of mine
Lays now battered burnt and charred
You told me I was useless
I was nothing but a whore
That’s all that I ever meant to you
As you walked out the door
Now all that I am left with
Are these fragments of my heart
Scattered in a million pieces
Like a mosaic of modern art
So time please do me justice
One day my wounds will heal
When the pain has subsided
Love in my heart I shall feel
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 10:40:42 PM AEST
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aw, Susie Q!!! This is so bloody heartwrenching! I'm so sorry
your heart is hurting right now sweetie. You don't deserve to be treated
that way. You are one of the kindest most gentle souls on this earth.
May love and kindness find their way to your heart soon and fill you
with eternal bliss!!
Wondefully emotive poem, none-the-less Susie. Beautifully written,
albeit very, very sad.
*hugs*
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by brew on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 11:12:44 PM AEST
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Miss Sue, you find Love again, and not hurt.! I know you will.! You have lots to offer, and they HAD no right to diss you and curse.! Those are ones, YOU dont not need. Thanks for sharing this with us.
hugs to you,
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 12:25:12 AM AEST
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awwwwwww this is such a sad poem
Thanks for sharing it ...
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by jmpy84 on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 01:49:21 AM AEST
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| great job sue always a pleasure to read your work |
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 06:58:17 AM AEST
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Sue, this was such a tragic write. Im so sorry that you're feeling this (Well if you are).
This was such a beautiful sad poem and i think that you wrote your heart well that drew us all.
Warm Hugs
Jane~ |
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by waos on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 09:57:19 AM AEST
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I like the line "mosaic of modern art" the best I think... captures
something somehow. Awesome write. I have been near where
this poem has been. And it ain't pretty :P.
~Kara |
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 11:32:45 AM AEST
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If ever a true and dedicated friend ever exzisted it is u sue, over time u will heal
and realize your true worth, a whoer u r not, who ever called u this can only wish they
could even obtain some one like that in there life, let alone be worthy of a most fine women like your self, another nice presentaion of your angelic skills, all the best 2 u my friend . . .
((((((((Sue)))))))))
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 10:30:16 PM AEST
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While I don't completely agree with the words "time heals all wounds", I do think such a caring and kind person as you will find love again. No one deserves to go through a heartbreak, but unfortunately it's something we can't always avoid. Every poem of yours has left me smiling, such a strong write, you can feel the pain so subtly. A delicate release of emotions. A most pleasurable (think I spelt that wrong) read. Can't wait to see more from you.
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by hauntedscorp on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 11:51:06 AM AEST
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Yikes! Is this who I think it's about??? I really hope not...I can't even believe someone as nice as you would have to hear crap like that from someone!!! Grrrrrrrrrrr....just not right! This poem is brimming with very hurt emotions, and each stanza tells a story in itself. You did a really good job with this write. Love won't leave someone like you in the dust Sue...just be patient : )
Scorp.
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 22nd November 2005 @ 04:36:01 PM AEST
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Oh Sue, Blessed Sue, I have been where you are and this is what I view........they say it's better to love than never to have loved before. I say to them, how can that be when my heart is broken into little pieces and scattered all over the floor?
But you were the fortunate one dear Sue, you WILL heal, and you will be a better, stronger, and more aware person than before. You are the winner if it hurts to see him walk out the door............He has learned nothing, and will never forever more. Just be blessed you got out alive...........I know many that didn't!
Your poem was very touching, and please know you are in prayers and I send you warm love and many many hugs
ConSue |
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by bobotheclown on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 01:38:50 AM AEST
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wow what a beautiful, yet terribly sad poem.
Time DOES heal all wounds however and
soon you'll be able to love again as you
stated at the end of this magnificent write.
Thank you for sharing this and I thought it
was quite well written.
*gives her flowers*
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 02:43:04 PM AEST
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Magnificent work here Sue, Eddy.
last stanza, prrrfect...
So time please do me justice
One day my wounds will heal
When the pain has subsided
Love in my heart I shall feel
Sue you are a beautiful person, people must learn not to judge another until they have walked in their shoes.. oh and, with eyes and heart wide open...My friends, God loves you Sue, Eddy..
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 24th November 2005 @ 12:28:11 AM AEST
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Sue, how could someone treat you like that? People just amaze me with their callous souls. Grrr.....you definitely don't deserve that.
This poem shouts out with sadness and pain but also has a positive spirit in it as one day your wounds will heal. So sorry to hear someone treated you like that but it did inspire a brilliant write. Very powerfully emotive.
Take care and thanks for sharing.
Tim
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by xxbreathlessx on
Friday, 25th November 2005 @ 12:40:21 PM AEST
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this was great. i found it easy to relate to (in some way) and i love the metaphors used. i especially liked this stanza, thought it was clever:
"Now all that I am left with
Are these fragments of my heart
Scattered in a million pieces
Like a mosaic of modern art"
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Re: Broken Fragments Of My Heart...
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by robertdavidson on
Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 04:56:30 AM AEST
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A very tragic but great piece of writing showing the raw passion of a hurt soul. And while I don't know all the details, I feel you did not deserve this. Time is the oinly healer. One day your heart will heal.
Robert Davidson. |
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