|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Plunging Depths
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 01:35:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
|
Cascading hope surrenders, and starts its freefall
(You're the only one, who really knew me at all...)
Descending into shadow, hidden from view
Running to escape, lingering mem'ries of you
A quivering, empty space, gone to waste
Happiness misplaced, another heart erased
The waves below crash down in mournful tones
The glass house shatters, being pummeled by stones
Structure not sound, hastily built on shaky ground
Preach something profound, where the soul below drowned
Scatter the remains of all that stays the same
Bloodied up stains point the finger of blame
Mirrored shards start to reflect a story of neglect
Mumbled sentiments spoken in foreign dialect
Cast into darkness when the sun plummets to the sea
Watery grave envelops, to silence its plea
Choking back tears, she takes one last hesitant breath
His ghostly image appears, pitching her to her death
Screaming helplessly, while she continues to fall
He was the only one who really knew her at all...
Copyright ©
hauntedscorp
... [
2005-11-20 01:35:45]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 05:32:20 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This was sch a sad sad poem. I like the bitter taste this leaves in my mouth.
A great poem Scorpy keep it up.
Jane~ |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Dizza_13 on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 06:37:46 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
i know the feeling
diz |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by rinx on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 11:14:43 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
do you know the feeling, when the world seems to grind to silence around you...? because all you can hear is the piercing misery of your own anguish... well thats how i felt when i read this... because your right, 'he was the only one who realy knew me at all...'
|
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 11:32:09 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
aw, Scorperina! This was phenomenal! I know love can hurt you,
but look at the brilliant poetry that anguish can and DOES inspire!
"Mirrored shards start to reflect a story of neglect
Mumbled sentiments spoken in foreign dialect"
oh wow! What a positively forlorn emotion that forces to the
forefront. You have outdone yourself with this one scorpy. Honestly.
I hope sweet, intoxicating moments find there way to you soon sweet
scorpy! You SO deserve that.
*hugs*
~Breezy
(who, in spite of all the mixed emotions rushing around our
busy lives, stills holds out hope that right will win and love unending
will find it's way to each and every one!) |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 03:33:35 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
My dearest Scorp this is such a sad write. You speak from the depths of your heart with this. A phenomenal masterpiece that captures your hearts true emotions.
Choking back tears, she takes one last hesitant breath
His ghostly image appears, pitching her to her death
Screaming helplessly, while she continues to fall
He was the only one who really knew her at all...
These words ring so loud in my ears Scorp.
You've outdone yourself with this very sad but brilliant piece of poetry.
May ur heart heal and may you find someone who is worthy of your love my dear friend.
I take my hat off to you dearest Scorp. You rock girl.
*heartfelt hugs to a very special Miss*
~sue~ |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by brew on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 04:55:32 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This write, allows ONE word...................."Magnificent"!!
Brew~ (all so ever knowing all words penned.!) |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 09:20:22 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Please allow me to say, I have learned by opening up, sharing the true me, has been the best gift I have been blessed with, and to think of how long its been that I have been partially closed down. Friends are coming out of the woodwork now, and that is because I have not been distant.. setting them off to the side. Blessed twice that they were always there waiting for me. They actually knew more about me than I thought, good friends do you know. A lot of this poem is written very educational write, it teaches well all about a person and how to keep a frienship, how to open up, to share, to let others know who you truly are, and then in that way there will be others who will honestly know you, the real you, which can provide trust in each other and all others in knowing you, the real you, instead of just one or two people. Very, very lovely poem here...
Sorry I have stayed away for so long, Scorp, I know I have a lot of your poems to catch up on..
RL |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 05:44:44 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
i love the way u write this is a very sad poem n seems to cry straight from ur heart. i hope things get better 4 u soon
ty for the advice on my poem s i am still learning
u r a great poet i can really see that |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 11:25:56 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Scorp...ahhh those emotions!!!!!
Its one thing to let someone in...once it happens, can we ever let them out again??
A very powerful write, flow, rhyme transition....all fantastic!! but ohh that contenet......sigh |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Lancaster on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 08:42:56 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Your poetry gets better by the day. No joke. I love the style here, the words are strong, the tempo is peaceful, and the message is coherent, lovely web of writing, woven as only scorp can :) |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Monday, 21st November 2005 @ 10:14:06 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
(((((((((((((((((((( Scorperiffic ))))))))))))))))))))
*HUGE *HUG*
*who knows even though she tries to deny it, ;-) Scorpendous loves the huggles*
A power poem steamingly penned by the Scorp like no other can do.
Wow, can't say much more as this poem is beyondo words.
So, what they said.....especially Breezy, she always has a great out look. Listen to her.
Love,
TIMriffic
:-) |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by LostAmbition on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 01:00:20 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
This is very deep & sad
the whole thing grabbed me
but the 2nd and 4th verses most.
Can i shake some sense in to this guy????????????
seriously!
i just read like 10 of yer poems
will u talk to me now? lol!
joking
im just playin with ya scorp
i dont mean to harrass u :) |
|
|
Re: Plunging Depths
(User Rating: 1 )
by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 26th October 2020 @ 11:57:10 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wow vixen this was incredible.
Why do you hide??? You should write for us every day. Now I know what a poet is...
.....
A kiss to your hand madame... |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
