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nameless poem
Contributed by
deathbringer
on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 05:27:24 AM in AEST
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Killing , raping , a destroying rampage
The time has come in history,to turn another page
Screaming , killing , destroying and bleeding
All the humans in front of me are fleeing,
The rivers will flow only in blood richer,
Humanity is only meat and i am the butcher.
Killing , destroying all in my path
it is time for you .. to feel my endless wrath,
The time has come for pain without measure
Destroying , killig , it is all my pleasure.
Swinging my axe in this forrest of youth
You will al die , you know i speak the truth
You will only feel pain , the escape is death
I am a GOD of evil far worse than Seth.
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deathbringer
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2005-11-19 05:27:24]
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Re: nameless poem
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by slogan on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 08:44:52 AM AEST
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the hurt and pain that has been bestowed upon your head shouldn't be the catalyst for your obvious ambition to share your suffering
on another even if you feel that there suffering would be legendary even in hell...jh |
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Re: nameless poem
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by JenJen on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 11:28:30 AM AEST
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really good poem keep up
Jen
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Re: nameless poem
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 19th November 2005 @ 11:20:10 PM AEST
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| i loved the poem in itself, except for the last line with a reference to a seth. i think you are an excellent rhymer, but that last line was so forced that it almost negates the rest of the rhymes in the poem. an ending can make a masterpiece or destroy one, i think if anything the last line destroys this one. i think you had excellent rhythm and style in this. i think those things along with rhyming are what you can use to set yourself apart from the mundane, because i enjoyed reading this. i think this poem can be improved with chaning the last line or last two lines and getting the misspellings corrected. |
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Re: nameless poem
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by assassinatorgirl on
Tuesday, 29th November 2005 @ 02:57:16 PM AEST
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| awesome. i think everyone's wanted to do the same before. hope the feeling passes. you really got into the head of one who would do that, though i have no idea if you would do that or not because i dont know you. |
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