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Wondering
Contributed by
sprinter27
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Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 06:40:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Wandering in the dark
Wondering where is the light
Looking for that park
Even though it is night
Wondering where you are
Wondering if you care
Wondering if you are far
Wishing I knew where
Wondering if I can find you
For you are my light
Wondering if we could be true,
Are you my shining knight?
Wondering why I even hope
I know you and I could never be
I am barely able to cope
The truth bores down deep into me
My heart is starting to break
It can't take all of the pain
My mind is beginning to bake
It is forced to live in vain
Wondering why I love you
Wondering why I even try
I know we could never be two
I know I might as well say 'bye
Wondering where you are
Wondering if you care
Wondering if you are far
Wishing I knew where
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Re: Wondering
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by Unbreakable on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 08:13:25 PM AEST
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I like this...repitition is used effectively and enhances the poem. A little choppy at parts, but over all the rhyme scheme is good. I liked the topic, it was touching. Keep up the great work..
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Re: Wondering
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by Misunderstood_gurl on
Sunday, 27th November 2005 @ 09:35:58 PM AEST
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| i luvs it! I loved the repetition at the end...it just sorta tied it all together. Keep up the gr8 work! |
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Re: Wondering
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 18th September 2016 @ 02:15:27 PM AEST
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Hey old friend.
You have been on my mind lately, and I hope you have found your light.
Great poem.
~Scorp |
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