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ME
Contributed by
butterflygirl40
on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 12:39:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Sometimes I can get bossy.but it 's just me.
Sometimes I am bouncy but It's just me.
Sometimes I am busy ,,, but it's just me.
Sometimes I carry alot of weight on my shoulder's but it's just me.
Sometimes I go and buy my favorite CD but it's just me.
Sometimes I hate cloudy days but it's just me.
Sometimes I am clumsy but it's just me.
Sometimes I drink to much coffee but it's just me.
Sometimes I am crabby but it's just me.
Sometimes I get drowsy but it's just me.
Sometimes I feel like a big dummy but it's just me.
Sometimes I feel so empty inside but it's just me.
Sometimes I am easy going but it's just me.
Sometimes I am friendly but it's just me.
Sometimes I go and pick flowers but it's just me.
Sometimes I am happy but it's just me.
Sometimes I hardly ever go places but it's just me.
Sometimes I am healthy but it's just me.
Sometimes I lift stuff that is too heavy ,but it's just me.
Sometimes I get into a hurry,,, but it's just me.
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Re: ME
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 01:57:45 AM AEST
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please if you are going to read my poems.
then please comment me okay, cause when i
read someone's poems i always comment them^_^thanks:) |
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Re: ME
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 08:04:11 AM AEST
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I think you're a tad too repetitive. Alot of people don't like that in writing. I like the idea behind ur poem I really do. You've got it within u to write such great poetry.I'm not criticising u honestly I'm just trying to help.
Goodluck and keep at it.
*hugs*
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Re: ME
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by Dri on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 12:55:43 PM AEST
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okay, here's what i think.
it's okay to have a few repetitive lines but when that's all your poem is, it can be frustrating. boring. this has a ton of potential, but i feel like you could change the format just a bit. |
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