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The Philosopher’s Stone
Contributed by
Jyssvw22
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Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 10:10:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Necessity requires this provocation
Those exposed in the center of attention
Impulse control in the midst of surgical implantation
Devices exert their hold and strangle the aforementioned
Unfolding at an incredibly rapid rate
Speed intensifies the orbit of the sun in space
Time is restless, and of the essence, it can not be late
Understand what you are dealing with here
Out of your league, the limit exceeds, daydreams,
Into nightmares
There is no sleep
Damage control, ruling overturned, acres getting burned
White phosphorus, mixes, populates,
Limited real estate
Restricted air-space, no fly-zone,
Bombs in your face
Send it on home, to be replaced
Shipped in a crate, destination unknown
The loudspeaker is broke
As a joke, they all wear earphones
Deaf to the commotion
All that can be heard is the roar of the ocean
All that has gelled
Has been shattered and broken
Where there is smoke there is fire
The power of a lie overshadows desire
The traitor to the clan is hung by a live-wire,
Retired, the electric satire, open the windows,
Let the fumes exit from the throat
Climb higher
The temple sits modestly on it’s the mountainous throne
The script, a recipe, of alchemy,
The philosopher’s stone
Transfer guilt to the guiltless beast
Heed the stormy weather, or see what it has seen
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Re: The Philosopher’s Stone
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 02:22:40 AM AEST
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Wow.
I really enjoyed this.
Hah! Where to start?!
Chaotic.
I think there is structure within this unconventional piece...beautiful rhyme scheme (or lack thereof)..it all tied in rather impressively...like overly-loopy 19th century handwriting.
I feel there are more than one philosophies to be learned here...almost as if there were one in everyline.
A compilation of life, itself.
This piece reminds me of concentric circles...it feels as though the piece has moved from a large mass scale to a something approximately the weight of a person, and finally the world inside of it.
And most finally to something so intangible...a philosophy...philosophies inside an umbrella philosophy.
Some fine work :) |
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Re: The Philosopher’s Stone
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by hauntedscorp on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 02:16:30 AM AEST
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What's not to love here?!?! No one can do the raining down of rhymes like you can!!!
It's always been one of my most favourite characteristics of your work...Well, I believe it's about
that time to announce you've reached a new plateau Mister Jyssvw22: )
Your writing has definitely escalated again, and I know this isn't the first time I've said that,
and it sure as hell won't be the last, I'm positive! Keep up the great work jyss...very well done.
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