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Chapter Closed
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 01:45:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
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You must've loved the fact
I bought your phony act
You fumbled your lines
once again the star outshines
Your cue---exit stage left
found guilty of theft
Sentenced to die a lonely death
a lump of regret chokes your last breath
Suffocate.
On the words you hate
A loveless lightweight
crippling castrate
Pay the ultimate price
a public sacrifice
Three words fell flat
let's leave it at that
Bailiff---arrest this man!
If love wasn't his plan
Feed him to the worms
I wanna watch him squirm
After, send me his heart on a platter
Devour the truth of an ugly matter...
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hauntedscorp
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2005-11-16 13:45:43]
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 02:21:54 PM AEST
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| well just say what you mean lol,,whoever did this to you , I'm sure glad it ain't me,,a really good write from a really good writer,,,Eddy... |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 02:23:12 PM AEST
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| All I can say to this poem is that I can stand just about anything, except for a lie. Most people get found out and they bury themselves down further having to make up another lie to fit the lie. RL |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by His_Infernal_Majesty on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 02:36:21 PM AEST
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| This really was a great poem. |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by lostrelic on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 02:57:07 PM AEST
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well another gold star for the filth of man sorry you women keep going threw this sad display of affection lies cheaters and false dreams well there is a few of us out there that are really nice but a very small amount just dont trust man i dont
r.m.wilder |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 04:02:04 PM AEST
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Scorp you star! This is absolutely sensational. The worst thing ever is to be lied too. I hope he squirms and you have his heart on a platter for what he's put you through my dear friend.Nobody, especially not you deserve to be treated in that way. I wish you the very best my friend. May you find someone who is worthy of your love dearest Scorp. Three cheers to you Scorpelina!!!
*much love*
~sue~ |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 04:33:22 PM AEST
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I'm at a loss of words scorpz, having your heart put through that is one of the things, many people hide from there entire lives. Those who encounter it, tend to fall, and just suffer enternally, never trying to pull them selves back up. I know that won't be the case for you. You'll find the right person, that one you won't want to live without, the one who won't want to live without you. That one that would never put you through this. And you'll be happy, just rise up, keep your chin up, and know you have people here for you, and that there are better days right around the corner. Another amazing write scorpz, and a pleasure to read.
-Cassy |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 05:44:27 PM AEST
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I love your poems, Scorpy.
Each time I read them, your style changes. You are so... unpredicatble, I guess. It's really nice, unique, and creative.
I like the parts in italics, it makes it shout out, and makes it seem even more painful. I can really see what you're thinking.
A good write, Scorpy, I just wish you weren't going through so much.
*hugs tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 09:59:35 PM AEST
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| this really is a good poem...i have to admitt i do sometimes lie about how i feel...but its not really in a bad way...its more about lieing to stop being lied to ..if that makes any sence..but anyway...very nice poem |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 07:48:12 AM AEST
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oh, Scorpy, BRILLIANT !!
so so much so! I love the way you can take a situation and
seemingly rise above it in your poems. Your work is such
a delightful and entertaining read. You know how I relate to
this one especially. And you are right my dear friend. Cut em
loose! Let em seek docility. Real men don't lie! : ) You
deserve so much better.
~Breezy
(feeling much satisfaction at this piece. Much) |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 02:05:56 PM AEST
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Lovely write scorp a most in your face approach u go girl tell it like it is a gem
of a write.
(((((((((scorp)))))))))))
Ben |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 17th November 2005 @ 11:48:49 PM AEST
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(((((((((((((((((((( Scorperiffic ))))))))))))))))))))
You seem to have a problem with self expression..... ;-) j/k
Wow, my monitor is melting. This is an awesome write! So thankful to you and the powers that be that this isn't directed at me. Never want to be on the receiving end.
You have a brilliant way of wording things. Whoa!
TIMraider
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by LostAmbition on
Wednesday, 14th December 2005 @ 12:37:23 PM AEST
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This is sad scorp
u really say it all here
i dont no why people do this
iv hurt girls b4 too but iv learned now
sorry youre goin through this |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by Alibi on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 10:54:59 AM AEST
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*Hugs Scorpy* :(
The poem flows very well and tells a very sadly emotive tale. Written very honestly, and again in great style. Love this poem, but sad about the content and reason it had to be written:( |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 6th December 2014 @ 01:56:28 PM AEST
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oooo! i love this one! it reminds me of a man i traveled to
australia to meet- after a five year online ''love'' needless
to say, indeed he fell far short of his promises- was good
for my poem sook tho lol, this is just such a brilliant biting
awesome write! bravo!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Chapter Closed
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by JamesStockdale on
Tuesday, 19th January 2021 @ 11:40:13 AM AEST
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Oh my... I wouldn/'/t expect anything less
from you..Lovely in it/'/s sadness and grief..
Sarcasm saves the day. It/'/s you no doubt. |
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