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the beach

Contributed by absolutspin on Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 06:04:40 PM in AEST
Topic: abstract



counting chickens by the reflections
on days passed, on days missed
gutter bugs stay down in the mud

once, too soon again to forget all
that's been said.
clean memory, white and shining

i'd prefer to forget how waves crashed
as you ran up and down the sand in my head
save the moonlight for your picture perfect me

i accept that understanding falls far,
rolling down under bridges that have washed away
loss of the green hue i carry
has made the obvious red a true color

pasting pieces with homemade glue
to this house of scrapbook memories
piled high to the surface eye

replace me with layers of thicker skin
a place where you can dive right in
seeking all the truths of sunshine
burning eyes that stare

just looking for a little light of my own
inside darker deals where caves house eels
down inside this deeper abyss

silent disasters flood the shores
as those empty waves keep crashing




Copyright © absolutspin ... [ 2005-11-14 18:04:40]
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Re: the beach (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 04:19:35 AM AEST
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  • Wow, I loved the unique style of this!

    Also, the metaphors throughout were pretty good,
    but admittedly, I fell in love with the ending the most.

    It was very powerful, and just seemed.. well, empty-ishly forlorn.


    Thanks for sharing!



    ~KayT





  • Re: the beach (User Rating: 1 )
    by Former_Member on Wednesday, 25th October 2006 @ 04:35:22 PM AEST
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    love it!
    love the beach!
    reminds me of the opening of grease (movie)
    how they fall in love at the beach!
    sounds like a good memory/series of memories
    wish i were there...at teh beach...right now...forgettign everything that troubles me


    Re: the beach (User Rating: 1 )
    by yangdantien on Wednesday, 25th October 2006 @ 07:39:53 PM AEST
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    I enjoyed your flow and use of language somewhere between lignuistic muscles flexing and strong confessional especially where you state:
    ...replace me with layers of thicker skin
    a place where you can dive right in
    seeking all the truths of sunshine
    burning eyes that stare...
    Here i am moved not just shifting with your metric:
    ...just looking for a little light of my own
    inside darker deals where caves house eels
    down inside this deeper abyss

    silent disasters flood the shores
    as those empty waves keep crashing

    Your use of imagery delivers well.


    Peace
    Yangdantien




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