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Yesterday's Guilt
Contributed by
weepingprophet
on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 01:49:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Yesterday's Guilt
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a hollow sip of yesterday's guilt
trickles down my throat
eyes avert the mirror's reveal
stifle the gag, undermine the choke
heavy the burden
the grasp of the debt
days idly spent
dwelling in regret
a choice or a moment
i am blind to tell
which one will withstand
which one will fail
tear the worth out
destroy what i know
a choice is so futile
i've only to let go
choice and moment
blind everstill
eyes avert the mirror
all its reveal
the guilt of the past
the sting of its revolt
the grasp of time's debt
the hollowness of regret
destroy what i know
i've only to let go
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weepingprophet
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2005-11-14 01:49:37]
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Re: Yesterday's Guilt
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by darkkai on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 02:16:57 AM AEST
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| I am totally blown away by this, it hits close to my life and those around me. clinching the pain and suffocating my mind. WOW! keep this up. do better than I in poety. |
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Re: Yesterday's Guilt
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by Dri on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 01:19:58 PM AEST
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hmm. angsty.
"eyes avert the mirror
all it's reveal
the guilt of the past
the sting of it's revolt"
pretty good, well written |
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Re: Yesterday's Guilt
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 04:25:53 PM AEST
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| This is well expressed, and I love the simplicity of its message, and the truth at the end: we can only let go of a past we can no longer control. |
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Re: Yesterday's Guilt
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by Man_On_High on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 09:43:07 PM AEST
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great metaphors
and very powerful first stanza..
I really loved seeing the absence
of the capitolization of the first letter
in every line...UGGH-
and the overall absence of puncuation
made this to be even more poetic than it leads on to be..
It leaves much to the imagination
and more room for self interpretation..
I really enjoyed this..
B
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Re: Yesterday's Guilt
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 01:54:26 AM AEST
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| you have already been told how brilliant this is, the most i can do is agree. yet another astonishing write, well done. |
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