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Roaming through the house
Contributed by
Whisper
on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 09:34:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Wondering aimlessly
Drifting from room to room
Touching without seeing
Floating in and out
as if in a faroff Dream
Simple things don't seem to be getting done
Waves of Confusion without knowing why
Never a whole job well done
Memory is getting cloudy
Me Brain is just a pulsating bloody
mess.
None of which matters to ....them
No one can read the state my minds in.
Just keep quiet and keep to yourself
no will know your secert,
No one will find out .
Evil blameworthy little Creature
Always Whispering on my Left
Crouching there with your heavy burdens
and smelly claws digging in my shoulder.
Making my feverish skin tingle and almost sting
Like a Billion Trillion needle like Prickly Pins.
Have you no pity
my evil little addicted fiend
Have you no shame
I lay Weeping rivers , oceans and seas
Snot running freely
Praying,
wishing these evil
thoughts be gone.
And I am finally
free.
Whisper
Copyright ©
Whisper
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2005-11-12 21:34:18]
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by brew on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 09:50:02 PM AEST
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Wow.seems you have been pondering certain things......that now have not seemed so bad.! It seems to me this is a write of the sort.! Some times we do ponder.....when we really shouldnt.! Well thanks for posting......I hope all keeps going to another path.! A good one.......As well.
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by grim6669 on
Sunday, 13th November 2005 @ 01:40:56 AM AEST
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that's kool!!!
*~amber~* |
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 13th November 2005 @ 08:31:46 AM AEST
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What a compelling peice this is grabs hold of the heart and emotions, nice continutity
all the way through it, nice style you have, you know your craft.
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 11:39:48 PM AEST
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Dear Whisper,
This poem is marvelous for it's darkness, confusion, and even reality. People do roam, sometimes under stress and sometimes do to it. I usually don't like Dark Poetry, because I can't relate, but in this poem, I could feel were you and how you got there.
Excellent job. just hope this is not you really. If it is dear, I send you a big hug and lots of love
Warm love
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 12:59:28 AM AEST
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Thats kool!!!! you always write such good poems!
keep writing .. love to read your poems! |
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Re: Roaming through the house
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 16th November 2005 @ 06:42:08 AM AEST
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A very unique style this pome has. I love the way it's formatted and that surprise (at least to me) of the little evil blameworthy creature. Awesome.
Powered with emotion and great imagery.
Thanks for sharing,
Tim
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