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Piper
Contributed by
ABySs
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Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 04:25:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Piper
Time to pay the piper
Seeds were sown
Time to rep whats owed
Teacher says "Times you have wasted"
Preacher says "Sin is all you have tasted"
Teacher says "This fate you created"
Preacher says "Pray on your own"
Teacher says "No place of your own"
Preacher says "Damned be your soul"
Teacher says preacher says and the piper knows
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Re: Piper
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by ChibiMiroku on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 08:01:04 AM AEST
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Wow. I like the topic....and how you expressed it. ^^
Well done! |
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Re: Piper
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 09:53:41 PM AEST
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| i dont really like how this was done. too repetitive with the style and using quotes like that. i dont like the freestyle part of it either, because it still seemed there was force rhyming, even with no format. i think youre boredom could be useful to you creatively, but as for how this was written, i think it could be better. afterall if more times spent on it, less time to be bored. |
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