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i've got soul, but im no soldier
Contributed by
socialmisfit
on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 03:45:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
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here i sit beside my lonely midnight lake
just me and the soft snowy flakes...
the only thing i can hear in my lonely night
is the wind wispering "everything will be alright"
but what if i want better than ok or just fine...
maybe i wont accept almost or maybe next time...
but fighting the tears wont make them stop
in the end i'm still alone...
like so many times before
and i still have nothing to show
except the bloody pain
that damn repetitive pain
screaming inside
pushing my real self aside
and im thinking of just walking away
just slip away with the night
disapear along with yesterday
and slip past this emotinal fistfight
im tired of heartach and sorrow
but ill stay if u say its worth while
and promise me i can still see you tomorrow
and by chance you will flash me one of those amazing smiles....
and in that instant u can look into my eyes
and see that you are my hearts one true prize
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2005-11-11 03:45:19]
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Re: i've got soul, but im no soldier
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by emystar on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 03:57:48 AM AEST
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Kindda sad but yet beautifully written.
I like the last paragraph best.
Hang tuff my friend.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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Re: i've got soul, but im no soldier
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by grim6669 on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 05:44:18 PM AEST
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i'm not even gonna read it.... the reason is you totally ripped the title off of that song from that one band...damn it!!! i can't think of the band name...but it's the band that sings that song that's like,"he takes of her dress......" i forgot the restof it...but yeah you ripped them off!!!
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Re: i've got soul, but im no soldier
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 07:55:50 PM AEST
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Typos....tsk tsk ; )
I must say, I love that ending! What a sucker I am for the mushy stuff...lol! Please don't 'disappear', how will I read your nice writes then?? I happen to really like the title, and the emotional significance it has in general, let alone to this write...Good job portraying your emotions here...Keep it up!
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Re: i've got soul, but im no soldier
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by SocialMisfit on
Sunday, 13th November 2005 @ 08:31:14 PM AEST
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i know its a line from a song, its from the song all these things that i have done by the killers and it is only used as a title not ment to rip off or copy them. i was listeing to the song when i wrote this and that lkine stuck in my head as i write this so i put it as the title
SM
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