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ITS like a scary fable or a carnaval ride
Contributed by
lostrelic
on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 07:06:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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ITS like a scary fable
or a carnaval ride
ITS like your lovers breath
on the back of your neck
Its the brightness on a soul
of a child
Its the innocent on a murders
smile
when they pulled the lever
on the killers fate
Its the love of
all things
Its the look in your
eyes
ITS my world the one
i disguise
Its part of my fate
what a twisted way it lies
Its part of my life
when you look in my eyes
when you see my disguise
Copyright ©
lostrelic
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2005-11-10 19:06:22] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: ITS like a scary fable or a carnaval ride
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 08:25:42 PM AEST (User
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Well executed, and interesting. I think abstract poetry is probably the best way for a writer to hone their skill at imagery, because it has a way of asking for one's best, rather than selecting based on relevance.
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Re: ITS like a scary fable or a carnaval ride
(User Rating: 1 ) by nannerz on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 10:18:57 PM AEST (User
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hmmm it was interasting but i liked it all the same :)
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Re: ITS like a scary fable or a carnaval ride
(User Rating: 1 ) by edwynne on
Friday, 18th November 2005 @ 11:24:02 AM AEST (User
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hey.... love the title of this one.. great idea.. the poem is good to!!..well done |
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