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Love Means Everything To Me
Contributed by
MajinZack
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Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 10:39:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Love means everything to me
If you love something set if free
If it stays gone, its just a memory
If it comes back, its meant to be
Keep it dear to you if you can
Help it out if it needs a hand
Keep it sacred, Keep it safe
Do not give it to the wraith
If its dear to you accept your fate
Or your love for it will soon turn to hate
Love means everything to me
You havent gone, so it must be
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2005-11-10 10:39:58]
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Re: Love Means Everything To Me
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by little_genna on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 10:44:14 AM AEST
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so sweet and i totally understand the lines
"If you love something set if free
If it stays gone, its just a memory
If it comes back, its meant to be"
I let my boyfriend go because he said he needed some time alone etc....a week later he came back and said he was a fool to think he could live his life without me.
such a great poem xxxxxxxxx *hugs* xxxxxx |
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Re: Love Means Everything To Me
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by Minus_Blindfold on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 08:14:37 AM AEST
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| catchy! You know you're not a bad writer. It's kind of blunt but creative nonetheless. |
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Re: Love Means Everything To Me
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 11:29:38 PM AEST
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| even though i really cant stand love poetry in the least (youll notice all my poetry is dark, depressing, etc), i actually found a way to tolerate the mushiness in this =] so that counts for something in my book. excellent rhymes, especially wraith. i have only heard mention of that only once, and i think its an original idea because of that. also i liked how it referred back to the beginning in the ending lines. i think you went on an 'if'ing rampage, which is quite redundant and a list. it stands out from the rest of the piece though for its concepts, i think that stanzas would be good to accentuate that, even if its this short. i think that since you use so much punctuation anyway, im sure you can make the leap to using periods =] i like professionalism in poetry, and that includes correct grammar. as for the title, its too repetitive for the piece, it makes the total of saying the same phrase to three out of 13 lines with the title included. i think titles should be able to grasp the poem in a way that wasnt grasped in the poem, or be able to spark interest, inferences, etc from the readers. your title now, states that love means everything to you, and that sparks no interest unless the reader is like me and wonders how can that be. it grasps the poem as its already been grasped also. |
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