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Dawn
Contributed by
Fernanda_F_Rocha
on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 06:54:54 AM in AEST
Topic:
NaturePoetry
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The naked light
Blooms in the morning
Cutting the dense thick fog
That rises impotent
To its heat
The sun shines
Overflowing energy
That crosses the forest
Waking up in a frozen sleep
Of the humid night
A music note flies lonely
Coming from a sleepy wake up
Deeply echoing
Bringing infinite answers
A hoarse roar
Shakes in a heavy body
Of a daring fatigue
In the shown laziness
Of the life that is not in a hurry
By Fernanda F. Rocha©
Copyright ©
Fernanda_F_Rocha
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2005-11-10 06:54:54]
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Re: Dawn
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by enigma on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 07:41:12 AM AEST
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"Cutting the dense thick fog
That rises impotent
To its heat"
"The sun shines
Overflowing energy"
"Bringing infinite answers"
"Of the life that is not in a hurry"
...these are the lines I kept going back to...for most of this week my heart, spirit and soul have felt an awful lot like that dense thick fog...and I'd love a good soaking in that overflowng energy...I need some answers and the accelerator pedal of life is stuck on the floor...retirement?
...it was a pleasant read...
...someone commented about one of your spellings...said it was distracting...don't listen...authenticity should never succomb to the impertinent whims of propriety...
...have a good day...
ron...enigma
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Re: Dawn
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by Rose on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 08:13:51 AM AEST
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Very nice, I enjoyed this one as well. I too get critized for some grammer or spelling. I feel poetry is within ones soul of your heart. Sometimes grammer and spelling are not a part of poety, but poetry is what you are from within. Truely a deep provocative write here.
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Re: Dawn
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by Fernanda_F_Rocha on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 10:19:24 AM AEST
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Thank You very much Ron .... always a gentleman :)
Thank You Amber Rose too :) I dont recall being criticized for some grammar or spelling...not because I'm an expert in English...even because its not my native language...but because I ask an English friend to review it after written :) |
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