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My Deadly Valentine
Contributed by
Kie-Kie
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Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 08:04:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Your eyes, once warm and friendly
Now colder shades of gray
The smile that once brightened all
Now fades away the day
Eyes so cold, so dark
No longer look in mine
Smiles cruel and vain
From my deadly Valentine
Your voice used to soothe my soul
Now all you say seems wrong
The arms that once kept me here
Now make me wish I were gone
A voice that only scorns
Keeps me from feeling fine
Within the strangling, murderous arms
Of my deadly Valentine
I look away when you look at me
I frown as you smile
I refuse to take comfort in you
Refuse to rest in your arms a while
I'm the one that brings the gloom
You give me your heart, I won't trust you with mine
I'm the one condemning us
I'm my deadly Valentine
Copyright ©
Kie-Kie
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2005-11-09 20:04:25]
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 08:10:53 PM AEST
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Most often when a good relationship turns bad or is broken by some aspect - including death, we seem to seclude ourselves from another one. While tempted to find another, the pain of the first loss was just so hard to bare, we dare not risk it again, thus, isolate ourselves from becoming in love - trusting, someone with our hearts. A very sad but touching write. Hope it all works out.
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by weepingprophet on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 08:15:30 PM AEST
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---"of revenge" was deleted by the moderators and can now be veiwed only in my journal---
~weepingprophet |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Apolla on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 09:56:51 PM AEST
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| This was a moving write and I understand why you feel this way. Your deadly valentine I'm sure will always be with you but carry him on with love instead of sorrow. Keep up the beautiful poems. |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Crimsonflame on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 10:32:22 PM AEST
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I thought your work was awesome.....it was moving,dont we all feel hard to trust another when someone we love is gone......I love this,it's awesome.......hope you will learn to love again.....*hugs*
Amber^^ |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 12:01:01 AM AEST
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| *Sniff* this one got to me... |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 12:32:43 AM AEST
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It takes alot of self awareness to realize that you are pushing someone away because they just can't seem to fill the void. I am betting that now with this awareness it will become easier to allow others in ... in slowly greater incriments.
Nazzy ~
( who liked this muchly and sends great big squeezies to you ) |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 02:20:26 AM AEST
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wow kie this is a beautiful and sad write.. so well expressed you can feel the emotions in this and I love the last 2 stanzas brilliantly written.. awesome job kie
Hugs
JENNITTUDE |
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Re: My Deadly Valentine
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 12:19:27 PM AEST
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You allow the reader a peak into your self awareness...and what an incredible look it is.
Great perspective, nice flow, but most of all...it so obviously comes straight from your heart....awsome! |
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