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Contributed by
Stalkee
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Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 10:40:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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I stared at you from far away
At all the magic around you
You have a smile that cuts through me
Like wind on a winter morning
I watched you talking with all your friends
And when i see you i love you more and more
Even if thats hard for you to see
I love how you make me smile
I love how you make dreams come true
Whenever you talk to me
I make pointless replies
But i can never sleep the whole night through
And it has something to do with you
Everyone said that I'm a mad man
But i know these feeling and i love you
Right now im sitting in my room
And calling for the bright moon
And everytime i say your name
I think of how I can't speak to you
And no matter what I do my silence haunts me
Copyright ©
Stalkee
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2003-01-22 10:40:00]
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Re: no title
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by OreO on
Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 10:53:59 AM AEST
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Hmm.....a title? Let's see...
"My Silence Haunts Me"
"DevilishToy"
"Beneath Your Dreams"
"Silent Passions"
Beautiful write Stalkee..i enjoyed this one alot...it's clear you write from the beauty of your heart...
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Re: no title
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by Dani on
Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 12:58:00 PM AEST
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How about "Like Wind On A Winter Morning"
This is beautiful!! :) |
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Re: no title
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 01:58:48 PM AEST
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| "Wind on a winter morning" that would be a great title, the words are so powerful in this writing, use it if need be, thanks for sharing |
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Re: no title
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by Stalkee on
Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 08:24:05 PM AEST
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| hey, thanks for suggestions everyone! im so glad you all enjoyed it!!!!! |
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Re: no title
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by banjo on
Thursday, 8th May 2003 @ 02:39:15 PM AEST
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| Yeah, my suggestion would be "my silence haunts me." Wind on a winter morning is the best line -- nice use of metaphor -- but doesn't really capture the poem. And I hope you will never title a poem "silent passions." |
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