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Drowning
Contributed by
poetic_influence
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Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 01:23:29 PM in AEST
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Give me strength
To let go
Because I can no longer handle the length
Of this pain deep inside that grows
He lies
He hurts me
But I can never say goodbye
I wish he'd just desert me
Because its not fair
So why do I have to deal
I no longer care
All I want is to heal
I can trust no one
Ever snce he came around
This is who he has made me become
It feels like I'm in an ocean just waiting to drown
No one will rescue
Because no one can see
All the things that I can no longer do
Because he has broken me
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Re: Drowning
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by lostrelic on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 02:46:38 PM AEST
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very emontional write kinda heartbreaking. I hope things get better as a man we dont all lie or are scum just most of us.
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Re: Drowning
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by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:01:23 PM AEST
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Wow, it's very emotional and well written too.
I thought the last few lines dealing with the ocean
was full of lonely imagery... i hope you stay strong.
keep up the fine writing. |
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Re: Drowning
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:17:26 PM AEST
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What an open, honest description of a situation that is so much more common then we realize.
Thank you for having the courage to share this, a very emotive piece! |
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Re: Drowning
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:34:31 PM AEST
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This is so tragic and yet beautifuly expressed it touched me effectively enough 2 feel your pain 4 the firest time reading u and i don't even know u, a most magnificent writter u r
u reach with out touching and yet make one feel.
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Re: Drowning
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by Kazzy1231 on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:35:52 PM AEST
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| Nice write,Please check out some of my poems! |
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Re: Drowning
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 05:42:40 PM AEST
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A very sad and emotional write. I feel your pain through your words. Stay strong and may God give you strength to help you move on. Hang tuff . Time heals all wounds.
*heartfelt hugs for u*
sue |
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