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Beautiful Soul
Contributed by
shyness
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Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 08:15:22 AM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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My whole intire life feels like one big curse,
I always say it will get better but it only gets worse,
I am haunted by that memorie every single day,
I never thought someone would hurt me this way,
Its all my falt, what I let happen to me,
I didn't stop it and why I still can't see,
I think my life is just ment to go wrong,
But they say what doesn't kill me will make me strong,
From now on I wont let pain win,
I will never in my life trust another guy again,
So I'll lock up my heart all tight and bound,
Even if I think the perfect guy I have found,
I'm sick and tired of letting my heart get broken,
Now if a guy told me he loved me I would think he was jokin',
I hope that some day a guy who really loves me appears,
but until then and even after I will hide all my fears,
After what I went through with this last guy,
I'm done with them all I don't even wanna try,
I will never forgive myself for what I let him do,
But I guess thats just one more thing I must go through,
I try to say I have a right to rave and rant,
I wish I could say its all my falt but I can't,
In truth its my falt I should have said no,
But I froze up and just let him go,
What happen that day has really taken its tole,
And I am forsed to relive it every time I here the song beautiful soul.
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shyness
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2005-11-09 08:15:22]
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Re: Beautiful Soul
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by wordsy on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 09:24:13 AM AEST
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A heart felt rendering.
You have quite a few spelling errors here,
but nothing that takes from the meaning of this piece.
as always,
wordsy. |
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Re: Beautiful Soul
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by Alibi on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 10:18:27 AM AEST
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| There is umpteen typos in here. You should check 'yes' next time for the moderators to double check the spelling for you. You did express yourself well however, and your words flowed well. Keep writing. |
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Re: Beautiful Soul
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by enigma on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 12:57:48 PM AEST
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...my particular bias is that only false pride is served when you ask for someone else to make corrections of any kind...I hugely value authenticity more than irreverant correctness...you be you, and don't let anyone tell you that what you are is not enough, no matter how well intentioned they are, not even if it is a stupid old boyfriend that doesn't know quality from a whole in the wall...
...I hope I didn't flatten any toes out there...sorry...my feeling intensified as I wrote...it's just that I come from a long history of being made to believe that I wasn't good enough...at age fifty-four, I now realize I always was, and it just kind'a sounded like you were doubting your own value, your worth...
...try not to blame anyone, actually...whether you blame yourself or someone else, it's just wasted effort...use the energy to assess what exactly happened, learn and then create a history of more healthy experience...
...sometime I write like I'm a know-it-all...I am not...I know that...I just feel strongly about what my experience has taught me...
...bless you...Love yourself...
bye
ron...enigma |
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