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Ocean soul
Contributed by
fireydragon23
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Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 03:25:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Its treasue below, its mask up above.
It was clear to me that i was in love.
Its waves are so violent, it tatters my boat.
Its waves are still crashing, yet it kept me afloat.
Its current is getting faster, it pushes me aside.
alone on an island, so I sat and cried.
The ocean is so vast, it differs day to day.
My love is lost in the endless blue, until it comes back my way
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2005-11-08 15:25:43] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Ocean soul
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 10:19:30 PM AEST (User
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This is has a hint of real beauty to it, and the images are good. You need to work on the grammar a little, but keep writing. Practice will improve your craft.
Well done.
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