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What this life brings
Contributed by
pig_pen2007
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Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 12:01:09 AM in AEST
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What is are life to be,
Why cant the future we see..
I see people struggling to stay alive,
and some falling from there highest dive...
Why dont people stop trying,
Because they are going to end up dying..
I look around at the new and old,
they all seem to have something to hold...
Threw the good and the bad,
Going threw the meories that they have had..
These are some of the things i dont know,
But its starting to come out for everyone to show..
I dont see the bad in life anymore,
I have better things to live for..
Living life as it being the last day,
When its over i know i have nothing else to say...
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Re: What this life brings
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by Rum on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 06:41:19 PM AEST
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| I really liked some of the last lines and the concept but you used a lot of convienent rhyming and had a lot of grammar errors. By convenient rhyming, I mean you picked words that were obvious commonly used rhymes or you picked to use a word simply because it rhymes. Anywhew, I LOVEd "I don't see the bad in life anymore/I've got better things to live for" |
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Re: What this life brings
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by Stephanie1991 on
Saturday, 14th October 2006 @ 09:56:10 PM AEST
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this shows how some people apperciate life.
very touching |
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