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Arotantee
Contributed by
fionndruinne
on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 05:10:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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I write of broken books
and the lost secrets of ink.
Listen to me, darkness -
it's a lost generation,
somewhere in book-worlds
and beyond the footsteps
of the grower,
who whisper legends of caverns
that don't agree.
I climb one more mountain
under leaden skies
for a victory I do not want.
I've found kindred
but they are not of the family;
I've found a fond language
of no meaning;
I've seen garo-hevtee
melting into emptiness
in brother-minds.
Arotantee -
I write these words to you
and your hopes -
live
after these broken lives,
who whisper legends of caverns
that don't agree.
Their time is lead
your morning is gold...
and the ink-marks fade
and don't belie you.
I write of broken books
and the lost secrets of ink.
© MMV ADL
Title: "Arotantee": "outsiders", a term for those not of the D'ni race
Line 5: "book-world": this refers to the D'ni art of linking to other worlds through the special art of writing called Regestoy, the Art.
Line 17: "garo-hevtee": the "Great Words", the special form of descriptive writing by which links were made.
Copyright ©
fionndruinne
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Re: Arotantee
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by lostrelic on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 05:26:42 PM AEST
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interesting write sorry not a fan of the game but a good write all the same
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Re: Arotantee
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 08:15:08 AM AEST
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About time the game gave you something back for all the hours you spent at it. Not wasted, because, hey, it was fun. But man, that part was scary! Remember the little kid? Remember??!?!?!??! AHHHHHHHH!!!!!!
Um, yeah.
Me. |
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Re: Arotantee
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 09:31:28 AM AEST
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| Andrew, your skill for expressing the fanciful and that sense of midevil honor is amazing....Have you ever considered a book? |
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Re: Arotantee
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 08:21:29 PM AEST
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I have to totally agree with Jecks on this one.
You'd do really well in writing your own book.
You're a very skilled and talented poet. Well done Andrew.
*hugs*
sue |
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Re: Arotantee
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by Loende on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 06:58:11 PM AEST
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Well, mo carraid, you have placed us outside ourselves again with this piece. Since I too have muddled about at Myst, I had a smile on my face to begin with. Well done, a ghra.
The other Me. |
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Re: Arotantee
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 09:33:53 PM AEST
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Well, Andrew, I am with Phil on this one. You have such a flair
for story telling. A book just seems imminent ...
This write opened up a kind of world for me. It was expressive and
oh, so intriguing. I love the effect of those two lines repeated at
beginning and end. Startling! To say I loved this would be a
gross understatement. How you do meld mystery so completely ...
~Breezy |
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Re: Arotantee
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 11:30:43 PM AEST
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You know... in a funny sort of way, I'm glad I know very little (VERY little indeed) about Myst and all its wonders. To read this without such knowledge is a delight. I'm sure the true meaning of much of this is lost on me, but - the expression and skill here is not. There are a number of fabulous lines here... and, as best I can describe it, a quiet sort of ache that runs through it. Oh, I like it very much, Andrew --- even if I have no real understanding of why. lol!
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Re: Arotantee
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 14th November 2005 @ 09:09:22 PM AEST
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Could it be you are a famous writer, professional and I have not found you in bookstores, please let me know where to buy your books, I sit here and read and the words and feelings just fulfill me, well at least you are not lost, your writing that is, and this poem is hardly broken... thank you Andrew, wonderful writer that you are...seems to be that I must do some research, but then again, I just truly love this poem... there would never be enough stars to lock in, so I will have to settle for the 5 stars they offer, I tell you, in my mind, I gave you more...
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: Arotantee
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by lostinmyself on
Tuesday, 15th November 2005 @ 09:49:05 PM AEST
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*smiles*
I remember everything you told me about this game... I am with Snemmy, not knowing about it properly really helps this poem. Still, I know it would be just as amazing if I did know.
I love this, I have to agree with everyone else though, you should try stories, I thnk you would be fabulous at them.
Andrew, there is something about your writing that I haven't found in anyone else's. I'm not exactly sure what it is yet, but it's special, and definatly a good thing.
Maybe it's just you.
Your words draw me in.
Great write, my friend.
*hugs tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Arotantee
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 20th November 2005 @ 09:32:48 AM AEST
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Yeah, I’m with Snemmy and Phil on this one. Im glad I don’t know anything about this game. You do wrote well (obviously) and I do think you’ll make into a great story teller, you’re the sort of person who has so much interesting things to say and so many things to share.
Im glad I was able to read this, nicely done Andrew.
Jane~
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Re: Arotantee
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 29th December 2005 @ 01:12:12 AM AEST
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Hmm haven't played Myst in ages, but I loved
this poem immensely. I liked how you started
and ended the poem the same way. Great
write it was well constructed and put
together... I'm nodding off here so I will read
your trilogy later.
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Re: Arotantee
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 7th January 2006 @ 02:58:59 PM AEST
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| Well your disclaimer read right in your author's note--it's an enjoyable read regardless of how much I know about Myst. I think a common thread in some of your writes is the fact that allegories make the poem most likely far superior, and yet, they're not needed. You hook with the words you choose and how you write, and the story behind the words just amplify it, of course. This was very poetic, if that's not stating the obvious, lol. The notes at the bottom of the poem were helpful, of course. I think I personally enjoyed the lines relating to the garo-hevtee the best, as the way they're appreciated by some is displayed nicely. Great piece you've written here |
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