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to render my attempts justified
Contributed by
weepingprophet
on
Monday, 7th November 2005 @ 01:33:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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the cruel intensity
your flaming expectation
guiltlessly i wrap the blade
in my own flesh
not first but eternal
a thought of pressing deeper
drowning purposely
a single image cannot muster
enough hope
enough shallow tranquility
to render my attempts brittle
this slice and empty satisfaction
is vibrant with laughter
torrid with familiarity
and calloused with agony
for the past two weeks
time's consumed in consolation
of a fate far more simple
than college
a dead end job
the beginning of what i am
seeping into the sleeve of my shirt
soft and bursting with relief
helpless
your face isn't the placid confinement
of truth anymore
you were never meant to
reach your unscarred arm
into the flames
burn sacraficially for me
no one was
nor is
there is a fate far more simple
than love, or hurt
it's cruel intensity
the flaming expectation
no longer of you
and greivously
i wrap the blade in my own flesh
neither first nor eternal
a thought concludes in me
pressing deeper
falter
hesitate
stop
not a single image can muster
enough sorrow
enough shallow anger
to render my attempts justified
neither you nor anybody else
can save me
the beginning of what i am
seeping into the sleeve of my shirt
soft and bursting with relief
helpless
i must save myself
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2005-11-07 13:33:37]
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Re: to render my attempts justified
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 04:06:51 AM AEST
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| a poem far beyond amazing. i have self harmed for years and it really spoke to me. i hope you are alright. |
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Re: to render my attempts justified
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by In_a_while on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 03:07:23 PM AEST
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First off... it's absolutely spellbinding! Your use of
vocabulary and imagery is vice-like....
My absolute favourite stanza is this:
your face isn't the placid confinement
of truth anymore
you were never meant to
reach your unscarred arm
into the flames
burn sacraficially for me
no one was
nor is
It's only a small glimpse of what is an amazing
piece of literature. Again, your style stands alone
and secure in its brilliance.
Keep up the most excellent writing! |
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