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Slipping away
Contributed by
mindset
on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 02:20:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Never been a religious man
Always listened to the old people speak
Never thought I was unlucky
Always worked an honest living
But I wished upon every shooting star
To be more
Listened to the muse of law
Read many things
Looked inside to find the rule
Looked up above to find a place
Held it so tight my last embrace
Looked into the eyes of an only woman
Knew true love was only real
Walked away when I should of stayed
Came back again a kneel long journey rest
Lost those close to me And bled the red rain
Seen the gold in many colors
Walked around and found the place so lost
Is it a crime to be the rest
I know we all loose
And sacrifice is our middle name
But what about us and what we remain
I seek the sky so much of my dreams
To be the same and only be
No more tears a lost
Just to be harmony no more inside lost
To all this that never was
We only tryed and only wanted to be
The unnamed cross
Copyright ©
mindset
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2005-11-04 14:20:19]
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Re: Slipping away
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by hauntedscorp on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 03:13:30 PM AEST
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This is a good, emotive spill, seemingly straight from the heart. Your thoughts and views here make alot of sense. I spotted a couple typos, 'loose' should be 'lose', and 'tryed' is 'tried'. Other than that, you did a good job here. Thanks for sharing.
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Re: Slipping away
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Friday, 4th November 2005 @ 04:09:20 PM AEST
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| i love it. beautiful, has a great flow. well done |
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