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Soar
Contributed by
MoonlitAngel
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Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 11:35:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Once I was so weak
Always crying tears you never wanted to see
I got used to your pain
All the insults that flew and battered me like rain
I chose vacancy
And choice is something you can't take away from me
So now I'm strong but numb
And you still try hard to make me feel like I'm dumb
I don't want to hate
But I felt no love every time we walked away
It's all you've left me with
So I mourn for something that long ago vanished
Every time you smiled
I felt so small 'cause you treated me like a child
I just wanted to stay
And if you told me to leave again, I'd still beg
Everything I wanted to be
Every time you looked at me
The love we had is gone, you see
You never really loved me
How do you sleep? Why don't you cry?
Could you bleed enough to die?
How do you breathe? Why do you lie?
Why couldn't you even try?
I don't feel for you anymore
I have no regrets, they're yours
Less than good enough nevermore
No regrets, so I will soar
I will soar
Copyright ©
MoonlitAngel
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Re: Soar
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 12:20:06 PM AEST
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Its sad but yet sweet.
good write. |
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Re: Soar
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 03:03:04 PM AEST
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Very well written, reminds me of a friend.
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Re: Soar
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by ever1der on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 04:30:48 PM AEST
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| wow, this is jam packed with emotion. great job! |
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Re: Soar
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by enigma on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 04:52:14 PM AEST
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...good expressive words...each syllable adds to the cumulative weight and heaviness of your pain...then when you finally release and soar all that mass just falls away...
...did you know that when birds of prey leap from their perch into flight, they always poop!
...they do...it lightens their load...really...
...I'm a daddy with three grown girls and one still at home...please, know your worth...there is not a man who's affections can add one farthing to your value, or who's insults can diminish your worth by any amount...and, if a man finds his value in your eyes, run...
...keep soaring...
ron...enigma |
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Re: Soar
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by blowfish_jane on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 06:10:10 PM AEST
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A truely sad poetic write. It shows a lot of depth to it and i like it. It's simple and it gives a reader the sense of awe and sadness while reading it.
Nicely done Dee.
Jane~ |
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Re: Soar
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 10:44:45 PM AEST
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Such a painfully sad write. You've expressed yourself so openly and so well. You deserve someone who will treat you with the utmost love and respect for you deserve the best.
Keep on soaring to new grounds girl. Well done on producing an outstanding, but sad write.
*hugs*
sue |
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Re: Soar
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 10th November 2005 @ 12:18:54 PM AEST
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This is a wonderful write as it effectively deals with letting go in an unhealthy relationship. Also, you present as very empowered and capable of taking care of yourself. You show wisdom by not wanting to hate, as that just keeps you locked into the relationship. Why questions are good for challanging, while what and how questions are good for gathering information.
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Soar
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 23rd November 2005 @ 04:08:49 PM AEST
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sad, yes, but filled with determination and strength!
I like the progression from weakness to strong....you do indeed soar! |
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Re: Soar
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 6th December 2005 @ 07:20:57 PM AEST
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Sad and emotional, yet uplifting with your positive spirit in the end. showing your strength.
You write very well and I enjoyed reading this very much.
Thank you for sharing your thoughts, emotions, and spirit.
Take care,
Tim
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Re: Soar
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by SocialMisfit on
Monday, 2nd January 2006 @ 03:37:47 AM AEST
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this is profound, you really make the reader feel your pain, and thats the entire goal of writeing is to convey the message so the reader feels it as if it were there own....way to go this is a 10 in my book....evin tho it only goes to 5 lol.
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Re: Soar
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by Willofree on
Tuesday, 3rd January 2006 @ 12:34:42 PM AEST
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This write is a good example of someone working through a unhealthy dependent relationship; and eventually becomes stronger and is empowered to break free. Poem elicits good emotion
Well done,
Will |
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Re: Soar
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by Kamal on
Wednesday, 8th February 2006 @ 11:55:53 AM AEST
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Hey you I really appreciate you as person for this poem...
It fit my situation very well...
Thank YOu
Peace & Love |
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Re: Soar
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th March 2006 @ 06:19:15 AM AEST
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This has been written with such depth of emotion.
Great work.
J |
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Re: Soar
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by JGB on
Friday, 7th April 2006 @ 06:45:44 PM AEST
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Sad, what a jerk.
I like the write. Good job! |
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Re: Soar
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by secretwind on
Sunday, 16th July 2006 @ 10:34:16 AM AEST
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| Emotional InnerVision |
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Re: Soar
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by tearstained_soul on
Sunday, 12th November 2006 @ 11:31:14 PM AEST
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fav quote in your poem- "How do you sleep? Why don't you cry?
Could you bleed enough to die?
How do you breathe? Why do you lie?
Why couldn't you even try?
I don't feel for you anymore
I have no regrets, they're yours
Less than good enough nevermore
No regrets, so I will soar"
good job hun, keep it up, 4 stars!
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Re: Soar
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by yangdantien on
Tuesday, 9th January 2007 @ 10:14:27 PM AEST
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Short, Sweet and Well Done...
I look forward to more of your work...
Soaring in Peace
Yangdantien |
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Re: Soar
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 02:03:39 AM AEST
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| Very profound..I can feel your feeling. well done.:) venkat |
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Re: Soar
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th April 2007 @ 06:51:46 PM AEST
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| bittersweet poem, I likeee in fact I likee a lot , ,, Eddy |
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Re: Soar
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 28th September 2007 @ 05:37:35 AM AEST
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I particularly liked the line
"And choice is something you can't take away from me"
How true that is !!
Nothing stopping you from soaring now I'm sure
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Re: Soar
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Wednesday, 6th February 2008 @ 03:25:58 AM AEST
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Well you certainly are soaring with the words you have crafted on this page.
Thanks for sharing this with us all
Steve
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Re: Soar
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by xoDEEP_poetx3 on
Monday, 5th May 2008 @ 09:54:08 AM AEST
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| beautiful job!! :) wayy to go! |
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Re: Soar
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by wizard on
Friday, 5th September 2008 @ 08:47:29 AM AEST
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great post!
i loved it!
wiz |
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Re: Soar
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by Loende on
Tuesday, 18th November 2008 @ 10:30:04 PM AEST
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Okay, firstly, let me say that I completely understand where this kind of questioning pain and expressionism well up from. I've lived these words, these thoughts, this journey. From that standpoint alone, it's a magnificent piece. The last stanza alone tells the whole of it. It just grips one.
Secondly, I'm an idiot and never realized that you're from Canada. I'm originally from Calgary and I'm always excited to meet my fellow Canadians.
So, in conclusion...I loved it. Great Job.
Be well,
Loende |
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