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Death
Contributed by
bit_me
on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 10:07:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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I''m dead now.
Suicide.
I hated living here.
I''m dead now.
Suicide.
you forced me to this point.
I''m dead now.
Suicide.
, but do you realy care?
I''m dead now.
Suicide.
A gun shot to the head.
You got your wish
And now I''m dead
I shot myself and went to hell.
I did it for you,yet now you cry.
You lay over my grave and think,"What did I do wrong?"
You held my cold dead hand when you found me
But where was that hand when I needed it.
I''m dead now.
Suicide.
Your hand was just...too...late.
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2005-10-30 22:07:28]
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Re: Death
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by Mild_Tempest on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 10:33:31 PM AEST
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Wow so deep, dark, and compelling. Great intense write. I liked how every stanza or so, began with I'm dead now. Suicide. Fascinating. Loved the ending too.
-Will |
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Re: Death
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by ChibiMiroku on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:20:34 PM AEST
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I liked how you ended it....and how you began every little stanza with I'm dead now.
Very well done! |
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Re: Death
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 08:46:31 AM AEST
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| a very powerful poem. well done |
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Re: Death
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 03:30:49 PM AEST
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wow deep write.
I am glad you didnt go through with it. |
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