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Love's Lament
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 11:59:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
LoveRemembered
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Weeping even, seems not enough
To wrench this aching from my core
With unrelenting intensity
It insists there must be more
I have cried out into the night
Lowered my voice to a weak moan
Dissatisfied still, it maintains
The answer as yet unknown
I have battled it within dreams
I’ve rocked to and fro in the dark
Yet the aching lingers in my chest
Pushing hard against my heart
But each time my eyes beheld you
And when we closed our eyes to kiss
Something wonderful would happen,
My heart pushed back a bit
The struggle between the two of them
Makes the answer abundantly clear
The ache would go, I’d be heart full
If only… you were here.
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Silent-No-More
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2005-10-29 23:59:27]
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Ineedanap on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 01:12:21 AM AEST
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| I really liked it. It kind of had an older throw back to it and i loved that. Wonderful write |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 01:16:34 AM AEST
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Prettily old fashiioned. I always loved the fact that Barrett and Browning wrote to each other and that formed the beginnings of my own inspirations, although it has taken different turns in the past few years. I love that word intensity, don't you? :-)
Blessings, J. |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by blowfish_jane on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 01:43:56 AM AEST
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That was just so beautifully sad. So romantic and so heart breaking at the same time.
The feelings behind this piece are wonderful Snem. It really is something people should read, to get inspired like you did.
Amazing write as usual.
Jane~
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 10:28:37 AM AEST
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oh, snemmy. A beautiful piece of longing and struggle
within the heart. I so relate. And how wonderful
that you can draw inspiration from Browning, (one
of my favourites!). This write touched me snem.
Deeply ...
~Breezy
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 12:33:46 PM AEST
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| Very pretty and well-written. |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Baronhawk on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 12:51:43 PM AEST
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"I hear a voice, a distant murmur
the tortured enticings of suffering lovers
such delicately delicious emotions
tender longings and soulful mentations"
A heartfelt account of love's lament. That feel of simultenous pleasure and pain. The aching of longings for a love and the accompanying distress of separation or loss. Shades of Shakespear's "Romeo! Romeo! where art thou". If you pardon my pun. |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 04:54:12 PM AEST
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| Just beautiful....sigh, It echos the ache withing my own heart. |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 07:24:38 PM AEST
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I like the honesty and simplicity of this very much. It's ok to give in to love ( smiles)
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Man_On_High on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:32:48 PM AEST
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Not the "old world style"
I know and love..but nonetheless..
It's got a special something that I DO love-
last stanza's best for me-
Sincerely-
Billy |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by ever1der on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 12:11:59 PM AEST
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| I'm working on sonnets right now, but for some reason they are very difficult for me .. this was exquis.... |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Wachumiri on
Thursday, 3rd November 2005 @ 07:58:17 AM AEST
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A good lament. My heart has felt that pain, I know your words too well. Hopefuly this is long gone, the pain at least.
Great poem, friend.
Take care.
David |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Hautebush on
Wednesday, 5th April 2006 @ 11:25:50 PM AEST
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| What an outstanding line, "...my heart pushed back a bit." A delightful image spoken with such poetry. Marvelous poem. Your homage to Browning has created a success for you. |
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Re: Love's Lament
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th June 2006 @ 01:04:39 AM AEST
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| I hereby stand by what I've said before. You have a magical gift of poetic verse! |
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