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Seduce Me
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 08:39:37 PM in AEST
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Zip it up.
It's the red dress tonight
Silky texture...
hit the club, looking out of sight
Grand entrance.
Bartender, fix me a drink
Music blasting...
can't hear oneself think
Step aside.
Time to hit the dance floor
Bass pumping...
rock me to my core
Hips swinging.
Her body pulsates to the beat
Watching her...
he walks over, intrigued by her mystique
Dress clinging.
Two bodies, gyrating seductively
Heating up...
his hands exploring passionately
Eyes lock.
Burning desire overrules logic
The kiss...
fiery, on the verge of caustic
Clasping hands.
Exit the club, nothing's as it seems
Ringing alarm...
Alas, this was but a dream
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Re: Seduce Me
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 08:47:19 PM AEST
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| Hee Hee. Cute. Cool the way you put this down. Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 08:54:19 PM AEST
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Hey scorpy!!!!! Sorry I missed the par tay! LOL
This was fun!
I love the technique used here. It was extremely
creative of you. So much said and the words you
used ...........brilliant! LOVED the ending! ; )
~Breezy
(who REALLY wishes she had gone .... lol) |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 12:13:08 AM AEST
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Wonderful dream at that... perhaps it will come true now, so have fun, go out, enjoy yourself. Its been a long time since I have kicked up my heels, I do not look a day over age 21 lol, my doctor tells me, sit down, look pretty, and do not get up to walk, your walk will give out your age lol. If I went out to a dance, I hope the drummer will hold me up lol. This is a cute poem, thank you, fun filled enjoyment to read...
Raquel Leah :D |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Lashing_Tongue on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 03:37:02 AM AEST
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| Hmmm....Maybe I'll see you in a club sometime and give it a try :P |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by sweetangeluk on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 04:40:31 AM AEST
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I remember the scene well lol. Not shaken my booty for a while. Get out there and shake your stuff scorp.
Superb dream
Super write
Love Angelxx |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by SocialMisfit on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:56:08 AM AEST
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:D:D i loved this, to bad it was just a dream tho, but poetically this was a col way to write i loved it, lol u never let us down scorp.
SM |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by MrJeans on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 01:17:41 PM AEST
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*Gulp*
I wish my dreams
were so intoxicating!
Maybe they will be now :)
This is an enticing read
but I almost cried at the end:)
Mr. |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 04:36:17 PM AEST
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| Wow great dream, I loved this,you are great poet , so keep em coming,,,Eddy |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Alibi on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 09:36:29 PM AEST
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Scorp my dear! This is an unchained poem, with open, honest expression. Sensual in nature, wrapping the reader up in the illusion. I hope you're having a great birthday my lady :D
Love and Peace. xx |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 11:03:32 PM AEST
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Well you knew I'd be back to read ur awesome work didn't ya, lol. As always my friend you can always produce a remarkable write to keep your reader entertained from start to finish. Some dreams come true dearest Scorp. Keep believing my friend. I hope ya had a very happy birthday, sweet lady. I raise a glass to u.
*hugs*
Sue |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 11:48:01 AM AEST
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Beautiful poem scorp, tinge of anger desguise as longing, none the less
done with elligance as always by u . . .
(((((Scorp))))))
Ben |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st October 2005 @ 12:17:25 PM AEST
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Wow, I loved it Scorperriffic!!!! I love the way you title each stanza. Like chapters in an erotic book....er dream. Yeah, too bad it was a dream huh? You know I always wish you the best.
Excellent write.
TIMraider
:-)
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 07:05:56 PM AEST
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The format is familier, yet I can't place it so I'm going to say quite original! and it fits the speed of the piece quite well.
Clever you are!! yes quite clever!!! |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by jyssvw22 on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 03:35:58 PM AEST
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| damn scorp that was intense..hotness...lol....cool visuals there...something tells me you have not only dreamt this...you know way too much about it to not have experienced it.....sweet freakin poem...i loved it |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by LostAmbition on
Friday, 11th November 2005 @ 11:58:24 AM AEST
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was that foxy lady
in red u???? ;0
nah seriously
wat club was this? lol!
i wanna be there next time :p
so much imagery in this poem
and its all very pleasant too!
really good job scorp
too bad it was just a dream
but hell! i'd even take THAT!!!! :p
i have missed yer work!
glad i got to catch up a bit |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by secretwind on
Monday, 28th November 2005 @ 03:59:18 PM AEST
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| hmm, another classic. |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by candysears on
Saturday, 17th December 2005 @ 04:39:09 PM AEST
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| Very good...God Bless! |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 21st May 2014 @ 10:14:03 AM AEST
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ha ha! that biting end line is so excellent! i was thinking:
oh oh stalker, trouble, outside fight in street; nope, lol! it
was just perfect, had i been paying attention to the rhyme
i would have known; for yours are flawless... but i was so
into the dancing atmosphere, beautiful writing!
hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Saturday, 1st November 2014 @ 08:32:49 PM AEST
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| HA! you, oh you. i loved how each stanza was broken down into a scene, with its own heading. very sexy, but alas it was only a dream, or was it? |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd November 2014 @ 01:03:46 AM AEST
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See? See?!?!? This is what I was saying in my pet peeves the other day!!! Damn alarm ruining a great dream!!!
Note to self: Learn how to control dreams and pass information to my Scorperrific friend. :) |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by JamesStockdale on
Monday, 19th December 2016 @ 05:16:01 PM AEST
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So juicy with a cute twist. Me likes.....
James |
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Re: Seduce Me
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by JamesStockdale on
Thursday, 17th September 2020 @ 06:56:33 PM AEST
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I was jealous for a second.
Honestly this was hot and great and the flow stunning like your dress.💋💋💋💋💋 |
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