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FAME WITH OUT A NAME
Contributed by
lostrelic
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Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 05:18:31 PM in AEST
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i sit apon my beliefs and wonder about my world
waiting for my future to finally start to unfurl
not content to live a quit life wanting to shout my voice to be heard
i just dont want to be another sheep another face in the herd
i want my name to be reconized for the better things ive done
not a mark on a cold stone when my time is done
so long ago a man was his name
and respect and honor was his true fame
now we are happy to die all in shame
morals have left we have become quit tame
the is my legacy with no child to keep me alive
this is the only way my sanity will survive
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Re: FAME WITH OUT A NAME
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by WAE on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 06:12:38 PM AEST
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I can relate...
Good luck,
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Re: FAME WITH OUT A NAME
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by flamingblade on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 06:54:29 PM AEST
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i really like it. I had a cup of expresso while i read it so , me likey!!!
good job!!!!
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Re: FAME WITH OUT A NAME
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 07:01:23 PM AEST
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Some really good thoughtful ideas in this poem.
I think I like the beginning of the 2nd part the best, about what your own desires are.
It seems like you were sort of "stuck" with the word "tame", needing something to rhyme with fame maybe. You might do with something that has the same sound, but not completely the same rhyme like "insane" -- which would fit nicely with the loose morals phrase. :-)
(as an aside) I think of my children as being their own legacy. I'm more concerned with what I take with me as to not having to come back here (life) if it can be avoided.
Blessings, J.
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