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Dull Razors
Contributed by
de5tructo
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Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 12:12:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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My tears are flowing red.
Switch pain for pain.
With blunt incisions.
Molding drops into rain.
Impure thoughts come.
Impulsive yet free.
My love turned sour.
And now it leaks from me.
Your razorblade smile.
Cuts through me like nails.
Passion and precision.
My composure now fails.
Inhibitions begin to fade.
To a spill on the floor.
Your laughter goes faint.
My romance no more.
Copyright ©
de5tructo
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2005-10-28 12:12:21]
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Re: Dull Razors
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by blue_angel on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 01:01:15 PM AEST
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this poem hit me like WOW.... this is REALLY good. it has to be like... my favorite ever. its very metaphorical and symbolic, and i love that in poems. it also has like, real smooth rhythm. oooh i love it i love it.
*scrolls back up and reads it again*
hUgZ.... ---> jennie* |
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Re: Dull Razors
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by PeachesJon on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 04:33:31 PM AEST
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| the way you capture a feeling in just one word makes me truly breathless. this is one of the best I heard in a while. |
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Re: Dull Razors
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th October 2005 @ 05:27:13 PM AEST
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I quite enjoyed this dark write.
"Switch pain for pain."
Yes, I can entirely correlate.
Although, sometimes emotional pain cannot be entirely drowned by the physical.
"My love turned sour.
And now it leaks from me."
-This line...most likely my favorite.
I fid your words articulate and effective...a good choice of words.
"Your razorblade smile"
A truly unique comparison.
Thank you for sharing this inspiring piece. |
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Re: Dull Razors
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by de5tructo on
Wednesday, 9th November 2005 @ 09:13:55 PM AEST
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DE5TRUCTO: I appreciate your uplifting comments. This is one of my favorite poems so I was obligated to share it. Once again thanks for reading my poetry.
-Drew (21 years old) |
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Re: Dull Razors
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by grim6669 on
Saturday, 12th November 2005 @ 01:36:02 PM AEST
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that was flippin' awsome!!!!
*~amber~* |
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