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The Taste of Love
Contributed by
Dark_and_Cold
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Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 08:10:17 AM in AEST
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“A delight for mortal souls, playing hide and seek in lecherous roles”
My lips ache from this delay
Darkness fell as I playfully pursued
Such pleasures are not meant for the day
But now my little lover is subdued
“No more games, it’s time to play”
With your eyes you silently plead
The predator has captured his prey
Now it is time to feed
Run your fingers through my hair
And let me answer your prurient prayer
Grasp my head tightly in your hands
And surrender to your carnal demands
No temptation like glistening ruby skin
Fiery kisses ignite smoldering desire
Let me taste your burning warmth within
And be consumed by your innocent fire
Leave no wicked desire concealed,
Can you see the hunger in my eyes?
Whisper to me what you long to feel
Shivering as my lips brush your thighs
No pleasure will I spare
In this indulgence we ravenously share
A fleshly temple your body truly is
So let me kneel and show reverence
You know of my maddening need
I cannot rest till I hear your cries
And for sating my unselfish greed
I’ll bring you earthly paradise
Cling to me, hold me for dear life
Your love is still my greatest treasure
I’ll show you the meaning of man and wife
That love is the true source of pleasure
I love how you cannot hold it in
Surely this must be the sweetest sin
Whispering your love or screaming my name
You alone engulf my icy heart in flame
Rising blissful to heaven above
While descending into an abyss of delight
Thank you my amaranthine love
For letting me sweeten your night
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Dark_and_Cold
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by mjh0813 on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:05:22 AM AEST
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i love this! nice job. keep writing
peace and love meghann |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by PainfulSpirit06 on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:40:50 AM AEST
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| This is a magnificent poem. I love the imagery. You should continue to write these kinds of poems when inspired to do so. |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by brew on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:43:50 AM AEST
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Agreed with painful......
Passionate write
Heart was put into this
Loved the line .......You alone engulf, my icy heart in flame
Such a soft description
Good write.!
Brew~ |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by vampyrekiss on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 05:32:02 PM AEST
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WOW that was hot haha great write so much passion. damn that was really good keep it up :)
vampyre |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by LittleMissWonderful on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 05:44:11 PM AEST
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| This has been my favorite yet... I absolutely love it! Thank you angel. It's wonderful. You should write this way more often... ^.~ |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by deadheadpoet on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 06:13:37 PM AEST
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| wow WOW...this one left me breathless man, god this was good, what a sweet write. Totally erotic, totally beautiful. Peace to you, Laura |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 06:38:49 PM AEST
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My lack of patience for the waiting of your poems seems relentless, I've yet to read one I haven't loved. You shouldn't doubt yourself in this genre of writing, it shows that your strong in all sorts. Amazing write. Can't wait for more.
-Cassy |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by NoSaint on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 07:45:47 PM AEST
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well done great imagery...
NoSaint |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by ArsenicMyst on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 07:59:34 PM AEST
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*
ok
i love the poem too, in the same ways
as stated above ...
however, i wonder if this was a completly
honest poem of love's evil lust, and of a demonic-like
possession over innocence
i feel that you copped out to the
more righteously inclined reader ...
specifically in the 8th stanza, last 2 lines
and the last stanza 1st line ...
because the type of seductive predatory
dark desire of the abyss you write about,
is not quite so "heavenly",
in the purest sense of the word.
these conflicting references are not in keeping
with the perfections of either worlds
nonetheless it is very well and exquisitely written
*´¨`·.¸¸.*Arsenic
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 08:39:24 PM AEST
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wow so beautiful and heartfelt.
amazing job. |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 05:58:01 PM AEST
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I think you did a great job with this darkly romantic piece. Never be afraid to try something new. This has a unique spin on the classic love story. It has a predator/prey type vibe to it, yet the love and respect is still so very evident to the clever eye. Well done.
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 07:05:58 PM AEST
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Amazing. I thought at first this was going to be more
lusty, but then you switched it near the end with the
stanza,
"Cling to me, hold me for dear life
Your love is still my greatest treasure
I’ll show you the meaning of man and wife
That love is the true source of pleasure"
This piece is full of so many outstanding lines, I
couldn't possibly centre out just ONE! Extremely
well done! Your talent shines through in writes like
this. Never say never! Enjoyed this immensely!
~Breezy
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 03:21:27 PM AEST
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A sensational write filled with great imagery. I like the way you bring this across to ur reader. Absolutely awesome. Well done.
*hugs*
Sue |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 09:11:40 PM AEST
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| Another vulgar, predictable write. I have lost faith in this site entirely. This will be my last post. |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Dark_and_Cold on
Tuesday, 8th November 2005 @ 11:43:15 PM AEST
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Have a nice life :)
Brandin |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by LittleMissWonderful on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 03:56:44 PM AEST
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Dark, you're an idiot, this poem was not vulgar. It was about a girl he loves, and what he wants to do to show her how much he loves her. I don't see how that is in any way vulgar. Furthermore, it was an absolutely wonderful write. If you can't make any constructional criticism, and all you can do is say that it was something vulgar and basically unoriginal, the you don't need to be on this site. You obviously have no eye for what is actually GOOD poetry.
Love you, Brandin. The poem was wonderful. Thank you... |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by LittleMissWonderful on
Wednesday, 28th December 2005 @ 03:57:34 PM AEST
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| Oh yeah, by the way, I meant to say "black" not dark... Lol |
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Re: The Taste of Love
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 04:03:17 AM AEST
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It's very refreshing to see that you can appreciate constructive criticism..
and please know, that I voice, my opinions only.. and that they are given, with the UTMOST in respect.. and the most sincerity as well-
..though the composition is fine enough, I think you tried too hard to create the experience;
relenting a bit too much, to another sentiment and style, other than your own.
L4, S4, is beyond conflicting, when just prior to, the more fitting emotion, in L1, S5-
I might echo the very same fault, in L1, FS..
also, by way of expression, when capitalizing the first letter of every line, it's prudent to capitalize the forward letter of words that relate to, immortality, eternity - ie: things, that are perpetual and unending that have some greater impact..
"the seasons"
"adjectival emotional states"
"critically amassed places that exsist, by faith alone"
(Heaven.. Hell.. Purgatory.. and the like)
..so dictate, the "Old World Masters" of classical poetry
..I have an absolute, affinity for the nonconform, absence of puncuation..
and when properly employed, this affect can ironically enough, bring life to an otherwise, lifeless, body of work.. in that, the readers disposition becomes superior; thus, leaving them to come to their own conclusions.. and so, if you do decide to leave your work, without puncuation, then stay true to that theme - ie: (L1, S2) ..disregard those futile bits..
I enjoyed the work, overall.. and look forward to some reciprocation from you.. (my spelling is reprehensible.. lol) and my errant, classification of poetry, is severely lacking..
My hope, is to gain a better understanding of these, and perhaps, other disciplines as well-
so get ready and take aim.. lol
Respectfully..
Billy
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