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Undesireable Future
Contributed by
justinblue
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Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 11:49:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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A deviant darkness, drowning my soul with delusional truths,and thoughts
Turbulant tidal waves of misjudgement and selfishnesh takeing its toll
Setting the course fo my future
A future unwanted, undesireable
Yet I continue clearing the trail to this future
What may bring enjoyment today demolishes my dreams and hopes of days to come
Fight seeking; and subdueing to some sort of instant gratification
Dig deep and find the contentness and patience needed for comittment
Comitt to your future
To your dreams and goals
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2005-10-26 23:49:01]
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Re: Undesireable Future
(User Rating: 1 )
by msbeeautch2u on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 12:46:29 AM AEST
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| Wow, awesome piece. I can definatly tell that you wrote from within the heart. It could be describing a variety of situations..good job! |
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Re: Undesireable Future
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by Rum on
Thursday, 12th October 2006 @ 04:49:13 PM AEST
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| I really like the idea of this poem and the last couple stanzas. My only suggestion would to work on the sound quality on the first half of it. Other then this it was very very good! It's actually the first poem I've been compelled to comment on. |
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