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Love me too
Contributed by
needs_change
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Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 08:50:37 PM in AEST
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SecretLove
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i'll see you tomarrow
i hope that's true
cuz if i don't
i'm not sure what i'll do
you can bring the sun to my skies
or you can turn them gray
all of that depends on
what i have the guts to say
even if i said
what i feel here in my heart
would you bother to hear
or would you turn your back to me
for that is what i fear
somehow i know you know
but if this is true
why won't you even look at me
i guess you don't love me too
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Re: Love me too
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by nail-to-the-head on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 09:12:02 PM AEST
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i really enjoyed your poem, the first half sounds like me! great write! keep it up!
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Re: Love me too
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by BurriedByMyLies on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 09:43:28 PM AEST
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| I liked it too, I'm actually in the same situation. Hope it turns out allright. |
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Re: Love me too
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by Jyssvw on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 09:37:47 PM AEST
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sweet is right!
nice |
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Re: Love me too
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by hauntedscorp on
Saturday, 29th October 2005 @ 06:56:37 PM AEST
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You have some good thoughts present here. You could improve by not concentrating so hard on what rhymes, versus the feelings/thoughts you're trying to convey. Also, Capitalizing the appropriate letters is important if you want to show you respect your work. 'i' should never be lowercase, same for the title. Keep up the writes though, and be open to advice and new ideas. We all improve through each other. Nice job, and I hope things work out on the love front with ya...
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Re: Love me too
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by pig_pen2007 on
Tuesday, 1st November 2005 @ 10:56:26 PM AEST
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HEY HEY SWEET THANG...jk ...AND U WOULD NOT LET ME READ THIS ONE ....well i did...and i love it......
just wanted u to no.....yeah so i g2g..bye n bye...lylas...
luv always shishi
Ur my best friend...dont ever forget tat.homes |
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Re: Love me too
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by Butterflygirl40 on
Saturday, 26th November 2005 @ 02:45:35 PM AEST
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wow nice write ..
thanks for sharing it..
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