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told
Contributed by
crazy
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Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 04:11:56 PM in AEST
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ive never told any one how i feel
ill never tell what you are to me
how you make me feel in side
even thow you dont know,i wish you did
people have told me so many things
they like me,im hot,im a witch,even a *****
but somehow i dont care
all i care for is what you told me
or how you feel about me
i told only one person
myself and yet i still feel
so unappricated
i told my friends how i feel
all sad and depressed
disscused with my pathetic life
but you told me how much i
made your day better
"wow someone does care"
with all our letters combined
we could write lots
of poems to each other
your so far away yet so close
just a mouse click away
i could tell you how i feel
but i dont think you would think it real
ive never told you how i feel
but now you know!
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2005-10-26 16:11:56]
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Re: told
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 04:45:08 PM AEST
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Being open can be hard, but once you break out of that shell - even if it doesn't last, it's a major break through. Great write.
-Cassy |
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Re: told
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by upomik on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 08:39:12 PM AEST
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| when you figure out how to tell this person how you feel...can you help me? |
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Re: told
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by Dri on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 01:29:37 PM AEST
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i'm confused.
this poem, at times, seems really mature, because of the subject you're discussing i get the feel that you've been thinking about this for a while.
but the spelling!! and punctuation!! it's distracting.
please!!!! i would have loved to truly enjoy this, but i kept on getting sidetracked!!
i know i probably sound pretty rude, but i just think this could be such a good poem if it was just polished up a little bit. your first draft isn't necessarily your best.
-with good intentions, Dri |
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Re: told
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by romance_pyro on
Friday, 16th December 2005 @ 09:46:34 AM AEST
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| What happens when you finally tell the person this and something happens. They go away or not sure what they want. Even though you want them you let them go. Nice write. |
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