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Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:14:41 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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In my stomach
is a little leaf with half one side torn off
and your name on it in black pen.
Except
that’s a lie; it’s still on the tree
whether or not
you’ll ever know about it.
Even if it falls and curls into itself
in winter. Or is picked off.
Or carried godknowswhere by the wind.
That permanence
keeps me soft at the tips.
I could digest if I had to.
Bite you into neat green shards
and swallow you whole. Or
try. Try.
I wonder if the letters,
rough-hewn grace quiet
across sap-sown verdancy,
skewed in a way I never used to
let you be, would smear and blur
as they slid down my throat.
If the sticky testament
would pool somewhere behind my
breastbone. Make an inkwell.
I think I could paint you then,
lines of calligraphy with
too many flourishes
to recognize the name beneath.
I think I could lick salt off your
lips, and manling, boy with steel eyes,
I know the difference now
between a kiss and erasure.
I think I could swallow my
tongue.
In my dream
we lean in and tell each other,
you are not crying. It’s a secret.
But in the moments before morning,
you bleed into my hands
and spot my fingers with ink.
Leaf, leaf; sunlight finds me speckled,
and I can lose you to
a leaf alone. I want to keep you
in my throat. I want to learn to swallow.
I saw you yesterday. You’re still there
in one syllable, dark intersections
with slender veins in the leaf.
You cross spines like sidewalk cracks.
And I, I inhale, I inhale the sky
and maybe you mingle
with the air against your name against my leaf
(my leaf).
I breathe in. You dot my lungs black.
My hands are beautiful in ink spatters.
I hope you know that.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2005-10-25 23:14:41] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 12:04:12 AM AEST (User
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................ *mumbles "wow" quietly as if scared to actually make a sound while doing so*
Goodness, Nora... did it feel like part of your soul came out with this as you were putting it on the page? I imagine you know me well enough to anticipate my reaction to this. There are lines embedded here that go straight to my core, but it is the whole of it - the overwhelming, profoundly moving whole of it - that has me wanting to find something or someone to hang on to as I hold my breath and go back for another read. Nora....... Nora, do you know what you've done here? Look at it, hon... look at it as if you hadn't written it. It's as good as any poem we gushed over during a late night chat (and you know those were some amazing works). It just absolutely is.
~Snemmy
(who needs to read it again, who cannot manage anything more and who... geez... just... happened upon something reather enormous here)
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 12:08:47 AM AEST (User
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Oh, posted!
Well, Nora, you know how much I like this, how powerful I think it is, and how apt I am to start disjointedly gushing again, so I'll leave it at that.
Beautiful work. Nice title, by the way. *smiles*
Andrew |
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th October 2005 @ 12:44:09 PM AEST (User
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Its as if all the emotion has been building in you since your last post and has now exploded onto the page in great inky gouts of magnificense.
So very well worth the wait.
Unique metaphors and such a strong emotional message...( I hope he does too..) |
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eve on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 09:43:28 AM AEST (User
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I'm still breathless reading this, you know. It's impossible to not read deeper each time, too.
I like the changes. Subtle, but they do enhance the piece quite a bit.
It makes me happy, seeing this posted.
Your fellow Viking,
-Gerty, or [sometimes] Eve. |
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Dri on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 01:11:53 PM AEST (User
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it has been a while, i thought we'd lost you...
god. i feel... whole. you just recently commented on my poem about michael and then i clicked over here and i feel... better. not better, maybe, just better understood. it's nice to know that someone else out here knows the impact of something wonderful that ends... that's such a weak way to describe it but since i have about five million poems dedicated to the subject i'll leave it at that and say that you are possibly the best writer on this site. i wish i'd checked you out sooner. |
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Re: Standard Deviation {Flyleaf in Transition}
(User Rating: 1 ) by Voyager on
Thursday, 30th December 2010 @ 10:37:22 PM AEST (User
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I like the beautifully abstract feel in this poem. It flows in a very strange way and into strange places.
My fav lines:
I saw you yesterday. You’re still there
in one syllable, dark intersections
with slender veins in the leaf. |
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