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Trapt
Contributed by
justingunshin
on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 02:53:32 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Where the rain drops fall
To this stain that crawl'd
beneath my skin to take this pain
Going completely insane, not knowing of
the chain, which held me down, to only attain
of being trapped in a cell, burried deep inside my
shell.
Picking pieces to count, the day to rebel,
where eternal judgement has arrived, to send people to a place,
who dwell, in a dark place, we'll eventually call hell.
Copyright ©
justingunshin
... [
2005-10-25 02:53:32]
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Re: Trapt
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by aprilrose on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 03:27:56 AM AEST
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| very well written with such rythem really great poem. |
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Re: Trapt
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 04:15:42 AM AEST
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Great stuff Justin you did great on this.
love and hugs mom |
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Re: Trapt
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by EverlastingDawn on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 06:56:32 AM AEST
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I like the poem
It has nice flow, meaning, and rhyming
Though you might want to change the structure a bit
Nice write
~Dawn |
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Re: Trapt
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 09:32:19 AM AEST
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| a great poem. i like it |
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Re: Trapt
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by paul_x_walker on
Sunday, 30th October 2005 @ 09:12:38 PM AEST
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rockin poem bro
(hugsandkisses)
*Jennifer*
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