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This Solitude
Contributed by
the_story_of_the_year
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Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 01:36:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I want to sit on a mountain
And see what we look like from on high
It makes me feel like no one feels what I feel
I am alone
But this solitude is all I've wanted
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Re: This Solitude
(User Rating: 1 ) by Blaze on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 01:55:55 AM AEST (User
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Mm... Short but sweet. I like it, and I have to tell you -- living in my house, I feel like that all the time. :-P
The only problem is that you use the word "feel" too much in the third line. "It makes me feel like no one feels what I feel" doesn't exactly roll off the tounge. |
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Re: This Solitude
(User Rating: 1 ) by Whisper on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 05:21:27 AM AEST (User
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Short, sweet and to the point. Nice write
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