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Rest peacefully Within
Contributed by
tigeram1
on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 01:12:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A brick can hold up a tower up strong,
A stream of water can flow into
an ocean stretched beyond.
Set out on a pth once upon a time
I came upon a fork in the road,
Since when can a drop missing once or twice,
cause an ocean to end up dry and forlorn.
What began as a journey,
long before the hottest day of life,
who can move much beyond,
without food, water, and all the other supplies.
I have left amiss many a bricks,
left behind many a thoughts incomplete,
planted many a flowers, fruits and trees,
Never did save them from the mouths
of the birds, the deer, and the teeth
of the rodents smiling with glee.
Mowed the lawn, forgetful,
ignorant to the grass which has turned brown.
The roof deteriorates, life seems completely without sound.
Don't you know the builder who puts up a house,
but with a mole in his heart,
I myself feel like I have a deep
hole in my heart.
You know the days when you start, but never end,
then you start afresh,
kill the thought before it ever begins.
But you dont want to be a house
with no beams or foundation;
but rather be the stream which simply
flows straight into the ocean.
Never can be sperated from the sea,
never finished, never can it really die.
Started on a path but with a daunting fork in a road,
I have left many a roads, but i can only hope
that I can a find a house in the end,
A stable roof on the top,
A little shelter to call my own so I could
Rest peacefully within.
Copyright ©
tigeram1
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2005-10-25 01:12:35]
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Re: Rest peacefully Within
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by Whisper on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 05:23:37 AM AEST
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Nice write Good flow and word usuage.
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Re: Rest peacefully Within
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by xXxmegsxXx on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 09:33:53 AM AEST
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| i like it, it has a great flow to it. well done. keep up the good work |
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Re: Rest peacefully Within
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:16:46 PM AEST
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Don't you know the builder who puts up a house,
but with a mole in his heart,
I myself feel like I have a deep
hole in my heart.
I especially liked this part. I did find some spelling errors, (or typos) but I realize it's hard to correct that now. In the future it might be wise to use spellcheck. |
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Re: Rest peacefully Within
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:18:17 PM AEST
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Don't you know the builder who puts up a house,
but with a mole in his heart,
I myself feel like I have a deep
hole in my heart.
I especially liked this part. I did find some spelling errors, (or typos) but I realize it's hard to correct that now. In the future it might be wise to use spellcheck. |
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