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this is enuff
Contributed by
moon_light
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Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 08:14:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
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this is enuff.
i cant stand it.
you call me names.
your no differant,
your all the same.
hert full names are the
words from your mouth.
as you pin me down.
your hand hits me.
i stay as silent as can be.
your past words go thrue my mind.
strangth i strugle to find.
thairs one way i can still have control.
a place i promised not to go.
a pain i felt i'd never know.
a choice imposibul to make.
my life i wish to take.
i long to let go.
this pain i wish not to know.
my heart beets fast.
a drop falls at last.
cast away and all alown.
a smile once bright.
refuses to be shown.
memorys of a life once lived.
spin thrue my head.
all i whant is to be forgived.
this is enuff!!!
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Re: this is enuff
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by MrJeans on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 08:30:34 PM AEST
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I hate to say this, but this poem
was terrible from a grammatical standpoint.
Your thoughts were good in this, but
the countless spelling errors and
bad grammar cancelled out the good.
Ask for your spelling to be checked
next time, or take a couple minutes
to check over your work before submitting.
Mr. |
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Re: this is enuff
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by thumper on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 06:57:55 AM AEST
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Your words shine through regardless of the spelling. I know, at one time, I told you to have your spelling checked,too. But since then, I've decided that it doesn't matter. The heart and soul of your poetry is what matters. It's readable and that's what counts. The feelings are there and are felt by those who read.
Great poem. Do I know about this time? Never mind, it doesn't matter. I'm glad you didn't have to endure this situation any longer. You don't deserve to live like this. You are too nice a person. Peace to ya, always.
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Re: this is enuff
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by Baby_Grl on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 09:35:10 PM AEST
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This was kute. But Jenny, you know I'm always here for you whenever you need me. You know where I'm at and everything, and I'll always be by your side when you and I know you need it or not. Your my Girl my Sis, I gotta protect you and everyone of my friends too. This is really kute. Keep writting more, there kute to read and they make me smile. :-D lol. I love you sis and keep smiling your self. Because your come up with sad poems and kute poems. Love you keep up the good work.
Baby_Grl
P.S. Any one who is being mean or rude to you, let me know, I'll do some kicking in the butt for you. O:-D ok. lol. love ya ;-) wink |
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Re: this is enuff
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by hellsfallenangel on
Wednesday, 2nd November 2005 @ 10:19:07 AM AEST
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hey hun this is good write its sad though but u have me now and no one will do hurt u ever agin or they will answer to me and my nice collection of knives. love u and ttyl byebye
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