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Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
Contributed by
ravensfire
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Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 03:17:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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To hurt to love to hurt to dream,
It was what I knew couldn't be.
She lifted my youth to a visible height,
And I held on with all my might.
I tried to stop my beating heart,
With that my mind wouldn't have any part.
I LONGED, I LONGED for her soft touch,
But when she did it was much to much.
She look's at me with a cat's eye glance,
She make's my heart skip and dance.
She make's my skin tingle my emotion's are up,
To her I salute I raise my cup.
The time's with her went by fast,
Those time's apart how long they last.
She opened my heart she opened my soul,
What is now warm was once cold.
Can't she see I need her passion her touch?
It's not that I need her It's how much!
Copyright ©
ravensfire
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2005-10-21 15:17:52]
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by lostrelic on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 03:52:12 PM AEST
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i have a hard anuff time thinking of my own titles but it was a nice poem
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by Elisabeth on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 04:23:20 PM AEST
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I like this poem! My suggestions for titles: Cat's Eyes, Longing to hurt, Waiting to Hurt, First Love, Farewell My Love, or Farewell (chick's name). Hope that helps or gives you some inspiration for a title.
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by hoist1atca on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 05:42:25 PM AEST
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Nice poem-
Should you fail to find a title then use untitled-
To use anothers title makes it no longer your own in whole yet only in part-
Sorry if this is not much help to you...
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 23rd October 2005 @ 12:55:14 PM AEST
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Hmmm how about this.
Longing for you....
Anyways good write on this one. |
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by ever1der on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 08:01:13 PM AEST
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| How about " It's How Much" ... just a thought. |
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by ever1der on
Monday, 24th October 2005 @ 11:22:35 PM AEST
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| Not That Long Ago seems fine to me .. |
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Re: Lost on a title, suggestions appreciated.
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 25th October 2005 @ 11:57:47 AM AEST
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how bout
Love Of The Raven?
good write |
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