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Palace Of The Dead
Contributed by
fredsmith
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Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 06:40:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Palace Of The Dead
End my life,
For must die.
Use the knife,
This is no lie.
I’ve been deceived,
God was never there.
I was relieved,
As I had no care.
Lord of the dead,
Waiting for me.
Death shall spread,
Corpses I can see.
Ease my pain,
Make it fast.
Blood shall rain,
He is here at last.
Lucifer I call you,
A sacrifice to be made.
All along I knew,
Before I began to fade.
Everything I hate,
I committed a sin.
This was only fate,
When he took me in.
By Fred Smith
Copyright ©
fredsmith
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2005-10-20 18:40:52]
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Re: Palace Of The Dead
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by crazy on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 09:19:07 PM AEST
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wow i lkied this alot its so demented and evil i jus cant get poems like this not many ppl write this stuff but when they do wheww!
dang this is so kool and dark rocking poem great job- jess |
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Re: Palace Of The Dead
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by Mild_Tempest on
Thursday, 20th October 2005 @ 09:55:41 PM AEST
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I must agree with with the comment above. Not a lot of poems can be as dark and evil as yours. And when I try, it's a shallow, random, thingy where there's just words and junk like that. Great write and dark. :)
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Re: Palace Of The Dead
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by hellsfallenangel on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 10:27:46 AM AEST
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hey this is a good write very good indeed well g2g ill read more of urs later bye
DEMON A.K.A ABBADON |
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Re: Palace Of The Dead
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by Elisabeth on
Friday, 21st October 2005 @ 05:08:03 PM AEST
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I'm not sure if your point was just to write a dark poem, or if this is actually how you felt at the time of writing it. Anyhow, you have talent and if you focused more on other aspects with your talents, you may find that life is worth living for. Well, I am not a psychiatrist or a writing expert, but I like the title of your poem and thats what made me want to read. I used to write a lot of dark poetry, but I've only posted one on this site. It's Force In the Bathroom, if you are interested. Anyways, good luck!
Kandi
P.S. God answers when NEEDED, not when one demands. FFT |
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